Drift Away

[xiddav]

As I Drift Away

Watch me as I drift away

Through the darkness

Through the pain

Through the memories I hold

Through the faces and friends of old

Hear me as I drift away

Through the screams

Through the pain

Through the cruel things I said

Through the voices in my head

Touch me as I drift away

Through the empty

Through the pain

Comments

[gynjii]

I like this one even better than the last one. I like it's pacing at the visual imagery it inspires. ^_^

Oh yeah, and I like the song Itazura Na Kiss - Inuyasha. I recently bought the entire Inuyasha soundtrack and can't... get... enough! ^_^

[xiddav]

Honestly, my darker stuff is my best stuff. Interesting that I don't think I was even in a bad mood when I wrote this one, and I think that this is one of my very best.

[discon_nected]

I liked the repetition and the shape of your stanzas, it was an interesting choice of rhyming patterns. I'm not huge on the theme of the poem, I preferred the last one, however it has a good flow to it, and I like the second last stanza saying "save me". Worked very nicely.

Sorry, I did alot of poetry analysis in school, I must sound like a pretentious dick =/

[xiddav]

No, don't worry about it. Becasue I take AP English, we have to complety destry every poem we read. I think that it kills alot of the poems effect, but hey, I kindof need to pass the class in order to graduate.