I really don't know how I managed to concentrate on the rest of the story when you start with toppy!Justin. Took me half hour at least to get to the next part. I don't dare go back to reread or you won't get any feedback for another two hours. ;)
“I can’t even explain what it is about fucking him that makes me feel like I’m seventeen again, and totally in over my head. Maybe it was the sense that I was barely in control of the fuck, or even of my own response, and that I had to find some way to be in control every minute of it.Much as I like reading pure, physical sex scenes, for me, what makes it stand out is when there is some emotional input or something other than just the physical description going on. I guess that makes me totally girly, but still. I can't believe that men totally turn off their brains every time they have sex so it's nice to know what's going on in their heads too
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“I did see my daughter being walked around the room on Hunter’s shoulders, with her hands grabbing at his hair while she squealed. Oooo.....Hunter got a mention. I love Hunter and he features so little in fanfic. I guess turning out straight didn't help his popularity with slash writers. :/
“I love you.” He looked like he was going to choke. “Jesus Christ, Brian, does that cause you actual physical pain or just severe psychological distress?” He heaved up off the sofa and dumped me on the floor, then stuck his hand out. I took it. “What the fuck was that for?” “We have to go upstairs.” “How come?” “Because you’ve caused me severe psychological distress and actual physical pain, which makes me need to fuck you, and I don’t want the kids to see that.” “So every time you say you love me, we have to fuck?” “Yeah.” That sounded like a plan .I tried to only quote part of this, but really it's just the whole part that works so well. Brilliantly concluded
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Re: Part two:xie_xie_xieJune 17 2006, 09:12:13 UTC
As usual, you do great feedback. Thank you so much.
I wrote a Mel/Lindz spanking scene, but I"m guessing that's not what you mean? *g*
We'll see if I can do that with Brian and Justin, I'm a little intimidated by some of the hot ones out there by others. Then again, who knows, once I start letting my inner Brian write some of this stuff?
*claps madly - Standing Ovation* Thank you.. Thank you... Thank you! I loved every chapter, the interlude EVERYTHING about this fic. “So every time you say you love me, we have to fuck?” “Yeah.” That sounded like a plan. Oh... my arms threw themselves into the air & I cheered like the big B/J fan girl I am! And the details... I loved the details: and some fat-free turkey bacon, the only kind of bacon Brian allowed me to bring into the house. I fried it in butter, though. LOL :) And this bit was Just Fcuking Perfect.... If bigots and homophobes can break our family up, then what did we gain by leaving? But then there was the best bit af all..... I am already writing the sequel SQUEEEEEEEE! I'm officially a big Xie Xie Xie fic whore now!
Well written, as always, although I have to admit I didn't like Lindsay turning into a raving bitch stupid cow *g*, even if her motivation was explained later.
That said, that was my only complaint :) Your others characters and Brian/Justin are just wonderful!
Well, there is so much Lindsay hate, and so many people blame her for "sending" Justin away, that I thought it was better to provide her with a motivation for some of what she did, ESPECIALLY taking Gus away and that whole scene in the playground which fucking broke my heart - and then have her really understand things differently.
Also, it was sort of hard to get them back home so quickly, they've only been gone 8 months or so here. I thought we needed some kind of big catharsis or that wouldn't be credible.
But hey, Lindsay is the most difficult character for me, I'm just glad everything else worked for you. :)
Yeah, it was weird reading it *g*. I really, *really* loved all the previous parts, but when I got the end of this part Lindsay's behaviour left me feeling awkward and uncomfortable - which kinda killed the B/J buzz for me, a little.
But then, you can hardly be made accountable for trying to fix something CowLip screwed up *g*.
Thank you suz.... there is nothing in this my beta slapped me more for, than how I dealt with Lindsay's meltdown. I truly thought it had to happen. I think she did too. But it was very touchy, because, well, for the reasons you showed. I rewrote those parts a LOT. The scene at Debbie's really was totally changed several times.
I think I said everything I wanted to say in the recs, but basically, this is one of the very best fics I've read in the fandom (and as you can see from the rec list, I've read a lot). I love what you've done with the characters and how you do it, and I love how you write. Thank you.
(Oh, and I'm friending you so I don't miss more of your fic. *smiles*)
Well, I haven't actually got a car, so yeah, sure, I'll have yours.
*laughs*
Seriously though, I've been searching for high quality fics in this fandom for what seems like forever (ok, so I only watched my first episode in about March, so I can hardly call that forever) and yours rocked. *loves*
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“I can’t even explain what it is about fucking him that makes me feel like I’m seventeen again, and totally in over my head. Maybe it was the sense that I was barely in control of the fuck, or even of my own response, and that I had to find some way to be in control every minute of it.Much as I like reading pure, physical sex scenes, for me, what makes it stand out is when there is some emotional input or something other than just the physical description going on. I guess that makes me totally girly, but still. I can't believe that men totally turn off their brains every time they have sex so it's nice to know what's going on in their heads too ( ... )
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Oooo.....Hunter got a mention. I love Hunter and he features so little in fanfic. I guess turning out straight didn't help his popularity with slash writers. :/
“I love you.” He looked like he was going to choke. “Jesus Christ, Brian, does that cause you actual physical pain or just severe psychological distress?” He heaved up off the sofa and dumped me on the floor, then stuck his hand out. I took it. “What the fuck was that for?” “We have to go upstairs.” “How come?” “Because you’ve caused me severe psychological distress and actual physical pain, which makes me need to fuck you, and I don’t want the kids to see that.” “So every time you say you love me, we have to fuck?” “Yeah.” That sounded like a plan .I tried to only quote part of this, but really it's just the whole part that works so well. Brilliantly concluded ( ... )
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I wrote a Mel/Lindz spanking scene, but I"m guessing that's not what you mean? *g*
We'll see if I can do that with Brian and Justin, I'm a little intimidated by some of the hot ones out there by others. Then again, who knows, once I start letting my inner Brian write some of this stuff?
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Thank you.. Thank you... Thank you!
I loved every chapter, the interlude EVERYTHING about this fic.
“So every time you say you love me, we have to fuck?”
“Yeah.”
That sounded like a plan.
Oh... my arms threw themselves into the air & I cheered like the big B/J fan girl I am!
And the details... I loved the details:
and some fat-free turkey bacon, the only kind of bacon Brian allowed me to bring into the house. I fried it in butter, though. LOL :)
And this bit was Just Fcuking Perfect....
If bigots and homophobes can break our family up, then what did we gain by leaving?
But then there was the best bit af all.....
I am already writing the sequel
SQUEEEEEEEE!
I'm officially a big Xie Xie Xie fic whore now!
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I'm all happy buzzy smiley now. THANK YOU!
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Well written, as always, although I have to admit I didn't like Lindsay turning into a raving bitch stupid cow *g*, even if her motivation was explained later.
That said, that was my only complaint :) Your others characters and Brian/Justin are just wonderful!
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Also, it was sort of hard to get them back home so quickly, they've only been gone 8 months or so here. I thought we needed some kind of big catharsis or that wouldn't be credible.
But hey, Lindsay is the most difficult character for me, I'm just glad everything else worked for you. :)
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But then, you can hardly be made accountable for trying to fix something CowLip screwed up *g*.
Just to be clear - you kick ass :)
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I DIE to think I killed anyone's B/J buzz. :(
I smile to think I kick ass, though.
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I think I said everything I wanted to say in the recs, but basically, this is one of the very best fics I've read in the fandom (and as you can see from the rec list, I've read a lot). I love what you've done with the characters and how you do it, and I love how you write. Thank you.
(Oh, and I'm friending you so I don't miss more of your fic. *smiles*)
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Your feedback made me squee myself.
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Well, I haven't actually got a car, so yeah, sure, I'll have yours.
*laughs*
Seriously though, I've been searching for high quality fics in this fandom for what seems like forever (ok, so I only watched my first episode in about March, so I can hardly call that forever) and yours rocked. *loves*
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