Girl behind the glass 1/2

[xoxmissmoodyxox]

Gasps.

Footsteps.

screams.

Nervous backward glances and thundering heartbeats.

That's all  Madaliene could ever remember from her frequent dreams. Dreams that seemed to haunt her, never relenting, never slowing down.

In her dreams she is always running, fast, aimless, and terrified. Her surroundings looked familiar, like the road she takes when

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[sherylo14]

i love it XD it's really awesome.
love ur stories, always will read them
looking forward to the next one =]

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[tunez_of_life]

Oy! Nice beginning, I luved it so much.
It's nice yet creepy. Lookin' forward to
the next chapter!!

[ext_533926]

Woa! that was scary ... Living ur nightmare!
and wats with the mirror??

cant wait till the next chapter

>w<

[xoxmissmoodyxox]

Thanks!

T_T

[sugar_addicto]

Wait, I'm too busy swooning over Cass. *sigh* He's so-- *chokes*

OMG MOZA MASHALLA YOUR STYLE IMPROVED! YOUR DESCRIPTION IS MUCH BETTER!!!!! WOOHOO! :D Now all you have to do is capatalize the sentences when you're up for it, and change one tense switch ("...with blood smeared at the protruding corner, she hisses and tries to pull it out of the dirt...").

So she spends all day in the beach, but doesn't she go hungry without food, and doesn't she feel like going to the bathroom? Maybe if you change the dream to be an afternoon dream, and then, she packs a basket filled with food. Reminds me of red riding hood. Lolz.

And the ending of the chapter is a little too fast paced compared to the rest of it.

Again, you've done great! We still don't know what's really happening but I'm definitely hooked! :)