we could be heroes (just for one day)

[eonians]

Title: we could be heroes (just for one day)
Pairing: suho/luhan (which is only a side pairing, the main pairings are chanyeol/tao and kris/sehun)
Rating: pg-13
Genre: x-men au, action, romance
Length: 1,191
Summary/Warnings: i haven't thought of a title yet but some parts of the plot are borrowed from 'x-men: the last stand' and the story involves

Comments

[fashcndy]

I love mutant or x-men au fics. that's my kind of thing! i'm looking forward to the chantao! that's a rare pair that i enjoy on occasion.

hmm, as for the critique, there are a few awkward sentences and phrases (which might be personal taste, idk i'm just putting out all my thoughts). And since you're writing in past tense, you should omit the usage of, "he's" since that means "he is" and not "he was"

Since action scenes, like the chasing scene, are fast paced and things are happening quicker, you should shorten the sentences. For example, where you put "Junmyeon didn’t know when or why he broke out into a run but when he did, the mutant caught on too. It became a pursuit." You could put, "Junmyeon broke out into a run." All the sentences prior to that indicate that Junmyeon is chasing Luhan, so saying "it became a pursuit" is redundant and takes away from the quick action