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[xprincessbloomx]

Title: By the Light of the Moon
Challenge: Family at lily100, Cold Feet at 30_romances
Word Count: 274
Pairings/Characters: James Potter/Lily Evans
Rating: PG
Warning: Implied sexuality.
Author’s Notes: I wrote this drabble a couple of days ago, but I felt I needed to add the detail that I wasn’t able to with a 100 word limit. As always, concrit or feedback would be

Comments

[mudblood428]

That ending made me want to cry. How tragic that they could never raise Harry into adulthood. *cries*

What a beautiful drabble! *applause*

[xprincessbloomx]

Thank you, V! *hugs*

[traceria]

Just to clarify a few things...

They decided to start a family...
Does this mean that this was the day/hour/etc they decided to start trying? Because technically Harry couldn't have been conceived then...it would have had to been late October or early November.

And Lily couldn't have been obviously pregnant the Christmas before Harry's birth. Technically, you don't really start showing until sometime in the second trimester, which wouldn't be until the New Year for Lily and James. Perhaps Lily had started to notice herself or her pants weren't fitting quite as well, but others can't tell. In fact, my own parents didn't share the news about me until my mom was a good 4+ months along and past that dangerous first trimester. No one was the wiser until they let the secret out.

And now you can laugh at me all you want for having ravaged various pregnancy websites when the fancy hits...

Besides all that picky stuff, this really was sweet. :)

[xprincessbloomx]

Here is the way I thought this one out: I decided to make Lily conceive in December so that she'd be due after the 31st of July; I guess because I think the whole prophecy thing didn't exactly occur on the dot. To better explain myself, I didn't want her to be due exactly around that time. (I probably had some twisted fate plot in my mind.) But I guess two months is a bit much now that I think about it. :/

And the "present time" (i.e. when she's already showing signs of pregnancy) of the drabble doesn't take place around Christmas time, it takes place much later... I guess the flashback might have been a bit confusing. Sorry this wasn't a bit clearer :/

Oh and thanks! Haha, don't worry about it, I'm actually glad you pointed a couple of things out :D

[traceria]

I see. But I guess two months is a bit much now that I think about it. :/ You could always pull a 'Novemeber...I meant November!'. ;D A few weeks premature is definitely an improvement over two months. :)

Apparently I was confused... I'll have to look at it again. Could be that the morning's coffee hadn't quite cleared all the fog out of my brain, too.

I'm glad you're not ready to throw sharp pointy objects at me. As a non-writer (i.e. reader only), I've tried to make it a point to provide better reviews than just a 'OMG LOVE!' or something similar since I can't really return the favor of a story or drabble. Yeah, so that basically means that most author's are wonderful about concrit, like you, when I get the nerve up to offer it, and they're usually thankful in the end. So, thanks!

[xprincessbloomx]

:D

I probably should have included some extra information/description on the end of spring/start of summer which would have better helped to understand the present time. The moonlight doesn't really say much about what time of year it is. :)

I actually really like getting constructive criticism because I get to catch the mistakes I didn't really notice when I edited the piece. The main reason I write is because I want to improve and having direct feedback really helps in that sense. Thanks again!

[chris_chick]

heheheh, 'pudgy' i can imagine baby harry being a bit chunky, but in a cute way of course.

:)

[xprincessbloomx]

Yeah, that's totally what I was imagining. A chubby, cute, healthy baby. Gah, babies make me feel squishy :D