Lj Idol 01 - Winding up

[xreesex]

Comments

[stacieann15]

I. Love. This.

[xreesex]

Thank you!

[rattsu]

Holy fucking crap!

... Yes, that was my honest reaction at the end. Loved this.

[xreesex]

Thanks so much!!

[sweeny_todd]

I think this is really well written Reese. It is atmospheric, and strong, but I can't say I like it! I don't like stuff that makes me feel uncomfortable and a bit icky. And this did those. Ok, a LOT icky. Very powerful!

[xreesex]

Haha. Well, that's a compliment for sure. I was worried it would just be cheesy. So thank you!

[majesticzaichik]

Wow creepy!! I've heard of these life-sized dolls before. I saw a documentary once on guys who owned them. They all kind of creeped me out, but one that comes to life is even creepier!

[xreesex]

I'm sort of fascinated by the people that would spend that much money on something that doesn't even look human but is meant to be a partner!

I wasn't even thinking about the Real Dolls though when I wrote this, haha.

[alephz]

Holy crap yes.

Yes.

Yes.

[xreesex]

!! =)

[shaido]

This is a great start. I think in places it needed to be stretched out a little. Largely this is to do with pacing and building suspense.

(Ie, the bit about pressing a button to release the glass case could've stretched out to a paragraph, and so could the ending.)

The story structure is great. Introduction is attention grabbing, and the curiosity towards the Jenkin's Doll is peaked.

Brilliant.

[xreesex]

Oh, I agree, but I was worried that it was already getting too long. Especially since people have over 200 entries to read right now, haha.

I like the idea though, and was thinking of expending it later on, when it doesn't matter how long it is, and making it a real short story instead of a quick entry.

Thank you!