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xtiltawhirlx

Matrimonial Surprises (12b/?)

Jun 17, 2013 02:39

Annie blinked at him for a second before the irritation hit her and her eyes narrowed; she put the cup down and carefully pushed herself up a little more. “Alright, Jeff. I think I’ve been pretty patient when it comes to dealing with your insecurities about being a father for the past nine months. I get it, this is something you’ve been afraid of ( Read more... )

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iknowitsbutters June 17 2013, 17:34:19 UTC

LJ has been a problem. Even with a new laptop, I have to double space every line before copying and pasting my work, so it'll show up with a single space in between each line when I post it on MM. That would probably fix your big formatting problem here - although I don't know why LJ wouldn't let you post 6,000+ words of text in one post. I do it fine on MM, so maybe it works different with your own blogs ( ... )

xtiltawhirlx June 18 2013, 21:37:05 UTC

I tried double spacing in Word and when I brought it over here it still went back to no spaces. I tried two different browsers and two different laptops so I'm at a loss. It's always been bad, but never this bad.

ncylove and I actually talked about the baby talk thing when her story was posted. We both had the same idea because when Britta was helping Annie pack up to move she picked up a stuffed bunny and slipped into baby talk instantly.

claymay83 June 18 2013, 00:14:25 UTC

I was just thinking the other day how I wished for an update to this story. And lo and behold, here it is. Maybe I should play the lottery, lol.

Loved everything about this chapter, particularly how completely in love Jeff and Annie were with their daughter the moment she was born. Also liked how you made Laney have more of Jeff’s features. Most fics that have them having a daughter have the child look like Annie, so that was a nice difference.

Of course, now we’re going to want an update chapter on the trails they’ll face as brand new parents.

xtiltawhirlx June 18 2013, 21:30:30 UTC

Hahaha wish unknowingly granted! I really have to catch up on your werewolf story, I've read parts 1-3 so I'm half way through. Oh and I think I've told you this before but I'm so hooked on your story about Jeff's daughter Lexi.

I noticed that in most stories the baby looks like Annie, too. I get the impulse, but not all girls look like their moms, I look nothing like my mom and exactly like my dad.

fangirl_101 June 18 2013, 20:18:56 UTC

AWWWWW!!! This chapter was so sweet, I think it gave me a cavity :)

xtiltawhirlx June 18 2013, 20:58:27 UTC

Haha jeez. Even when I try to keep it from getting to disgustingly mushy it still gives you cavities!

fangirl_101 June 19 2013, 14:41:45 UTC

Fic cavities are the only cavities I enjoy getting! I love fluff!

dan_kolby August 6 2013, 00:08:20 UTC

First of all. I really love the story. But something's has been bothering me for some time. Why have you made Jeff Winger so soft? It like this story is purely Annie dominating it all and no Jeff to counter it. But else I really admire your work :)

Second of all really loved your Halloween promt. Do you by any chance want to make an other one like it?

xtiltawhirlx August 6 2013, 02:25:34 UTC

Hmm, you know that's an interesting criticism that has never been pointed out to me before, I kind of see what you're saying, though. Now that I think about it it's probably some over compensating on my part. I prefer to write for Jeff and identify with his personality more, if I wasn't careful it would mostly be about Jeff. But now that you've mentioned it I probably go a little too far the other way to try to prevent that from happening and instead it becomes too much about Annie. I'll definitely try to be more aware of when it goes to far from now on.

The Halloween story is my favorite, too. Maybe I'll write another one this October :)