experimental weirdness, part 11

[xwaltzforvenus]

Title: An End Has a Start
Rating: R, defo
A/N: Um... this chapter seemed darker than normal... *ahem*
A/N 2: follow the tags for previous

Comments

[beege22]

About halfway through it occurred to me that pathetic Parker could only attract attention like this for some truly pathetic reason.

Parker should get hit a lot more often in this fic, preferably by everyone, but especially Taylor since his lying put her in danger (and how lame that he wouldn't admit to what's going on when he knew she was in trouble - I hope she finds out about that). Enjoying this, especially when there's too much action to get bogged down in angst, but I still hope to see a revelatory moment on Taylor's part, given that it's one of the things you seem to have been building up to.

[beege22]

Wait - did Ryan hit parker, or did he hit Seth so that Seth couldn't stop him from doing something really awful to parker? I just realised that scene is somewhat ambiguous (which I assume is deliberate).

[xwaltzforvenus]

No, that section was from Parker's POV, so he punched Parker.

For once I didn't make something vague on purpose. Damn. I'm slipping.

[kazfloyd]

Oh, I had to reread that part a couple of times. I thought Ryan hit Seth too. I am glad he finally hit Parker though. He deserved it.

Poor Summer.

[xwaltzforvenus]

Ok, I think I may go back and change that sentence so it's clearer...

[taylorforever]

Vampires with a sense of humor. wow. And I agree with beege22 Go on, hit Parker. Love Summer in this chapter.

[xwaltzforvenus]

I was having lots of fun with Summer in this. Probably because, of the four, she's the one I write the least.

[tamiasangel]

poor Summer, at least Taylor gets to be asleep throughout this. I understood the sentence the first time but I hadn't reviewed yet. Update soon, I'm on the edge of my seat.

[xwaltzforvenus]

I changed the sentence, just so it wouldn't be ambiguous. Nice to hear, though, that it wasn't too confusing.

Thanks!