fic: LSF

[xwaltzforvenus]

Title: LSF
Rating: PG13
A/N: so... this is the end. I'm quite proud of myself, actually. I saw it as a four-parter and I followed through. Yay for me!
A/N 2: Also, I wrote this really quickly and I'm really tired, so hopefully it's ok.

part one
part two
part three

Comments

[xwaltzforvenus]

Aww, thanks!

[kazfloyd]

Loved it!! While I do miss the Cohen's, I am enjoying mature and responsible Trey.

[xwaltzforvenus]

I just noticed that the Cohens (read: Sandy and Kirsten, not the full Cohen family) aren't in either of my current fics. They're dead in my experimental weirdness and just not here in this one. Hm...

But I love writing Trey. He makes me happy.

[beege22]

Huh. I was really expecting this to be a much longer fic when you started it (the opening chapters had the feel of setting up for something long-term - in terms of what period of time the fic encompassed) and I was a little worried when I saw this was the last chapter, but I do quite like the way you ended it (I was expecting an open ending, given the short length).

And again with all the neat little details. :)

[xwaltzforvenus]

Maybe it seemed like it should've been longer, but in my head, I always knew I was going to end it like this, so I only saw it as around four parts. Dragging it out longer would've been ridiculous. It was supposed to be like an extended one-shot (a day spent in Arturo's garage, where Ryan meets a weird girl who convinces him to talk to Trey about his future). Maybe I'll do an epilogue in the future, but I dunno.

This had details? I thought this was kind of rushed, I didn't really put many details in at all. Then again, I was really out of it, writing this.

[beege22]

Little details like Ryan wondering why it bothers him that Taylor and Theresa aren't talking about him (stuff that you apparently do automatically - impressive).

And I was already reconsidering this fic, beginning to see it as a sort of slice-of-life piece, so I sort of get what you mean about it being like an extended oneshot. I think it's because you give so much background info (Ryan thinks about his ex, Taylor talks about Newport in this 'verse) that it felt to me like you were worldbuilding for something bigger.

(That's not a criticism, just an observation. As I said, I really enjoyed this bit of light relief).

[fifimom]

Really nice. I found it very touching. Thanks.

[xwaltzforvenus]

Thank you!

[alluxera]

I really liked the ending, it was a nice little story without the big drama, and it showed Ryan's life without the Cohen's.

[xwaltzforvenus]

Sometimes I need a break from the constant drama. That was kind of the purpose of this.

Thanks!