snow day oneshot

[xwaltzforvenus]

Title: Common Reactor
Rating: R
A/N: Can you tell I'm bored? It's the fourth day into my Spring Break and I'm stuck inside because of this stupid snow and I'm boooorrrreeddd.
A/N 2: Um... I hope this isn't confusing. I've done that thing I do, where I don't use names. Or dialogue. So I hope this isn't confusing. Oh, and it's rated because it's all

Comments

[r_mak]

I'm not a huge fan of snow and coldness either.

Great job! Even though you didn't use any names you gave enough info to be able to tell who each girl was. I think the lack of names made this fun because it made me keep my eyes open for clues to try and figure it all out.

Okay, so the one itsy bitsy little thing I don't like about this is Ryan's description of Sadie's hair. It is well written... but my hair is like hers. It's long, dark and somewhere between curly and wavy. *sigh* Makes me wonder...

:) For very selfish reasons, I'm kind of glad that you're so bored.

[xwaltzforvenus]

I seem to do that a lot, where I don't use names or dialogue.

As for the hair thing, I totally didn't mean it! I was simply trying to point out that Sadie was the exact opposite of Marissa, and even Theresa and Lindsay had straight hair, and then he moved on to Taylor, who has straight, light hair. It was just my way of saying that Sadie was him trying to pretend like he doesn't like the Marissa type.

Well, I'm not bored today or tomorrow (boo work) but maybe I'll get more chances to write this break.

[r_mak]

That pic is hot... I mean really... look at his face and you can see the muscles on his arm... dayum... Crap! Drooling on the keyboard is a serious no-no.

Ah, yes... my point: That makes sense. After all, Sadie was the rebound. I also liked your portrayal of Ryan's first time with Marissa... it was so awkward in a good way - the sand getting in between them and all the planning it took for it to happen. The way he noticed it all and didn't really like it and the way she loved the whole situation shows how different they were.

I look forward to whatever you write whenever you write it.

[xwaltzforvenus]

I do love the picture... I seem to use it a lot...

As I've said (somewhere), the Ryan/Marissa part in this was my favorite.

[kazfloyd]

Great job of putting this together!

I preferred it without the names. The descriptions were perfect of each time and each girl. I really liked how you described Sadie as everything he thought he wanted and how boring it was. Ryan definetly needed more in a girl.

I have been waiting for you to do a fill in on what really happened NYE with R/T. I enjoyed it!

[xwaltzforvenus]

Yay! Thank you!

And I've thought about doing an actual NYE story, but it's been done enough, and by better people, so I'm leaving it alone.

[xwaltzforvenus]

Oh my... (don't worry, long comments make me smile)

You know, out of all of these, I rather like the Ryan/Marissa segment. I don't know why. I spend so much time hating her, I kind of like writing their dysfunction.

As for a Ryan/Taylor first time? I think I vaguely mentioned it in a oneshot (from my promptfics), but I've never really gone into detail. Who knows, maybe I'll get around to it, but I seem to be on an angst roll these days.

[xwaltzforvenus]

Here's the oneshot, but be warned, it's completely AU. Although I guess you could consider it non-AU up until... well, until it goes weird.

http://xwaltzforvenus.livejournal.com/5769.html

[taylorforever]

As always a lot of insight into human nature and the particular human being Ryan Atwood. Love it. But where does the fixation on hair come from? I have never seen it like this. you are a genius.

[xwaltzforvenus]

The hair thing was simply to show how different Sadie was from all his other girlfriends. Nothing else to it, really.

Thanks!

[katienat]

This is so lovely! I enjoyed reading your other fics as well, especially "Cheaper Than Therapy"- I like me some angst :) I hope you don't mind, I've added you as a friend.

[xwaltzforvenus]

Thanks much! I'm glad you like my crazy ramblings!