I know you said you already got it beta'd, but hope you don't mind if I point out a few errors that got missed...
The high profile of preacher Williams' murder s had inspired other doom-preachers to point their fingers at Lucifer. -- Extra letter "s"
This was where here instincts told her to get in her car and start driving. -- Her, not here.
A ragged group of people was approaching, the nearer ones breaking into a run. -- Were, not was.
A sigh. "This choice, unfortunately, can't be a conscious one. You either admit the possibility into your rational mind or you do not. This is the best I can offer. So please, Chloe, rest." -- Not sure what you actually meant to say here. If you mean her mind has to make the decision while still sleeping, or if you meant she'd have to make a rational choice while awake? If the former, then "can't be a conscious one" is okay, but take out the word "rational" in the next line. If the latter, change "conscious" to "subconscious" and keep the word "rational". They rather contradict each other
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The high profile of preacher Williams' murder s had inspired other doom-preachers to point their fingers at Lucifer. -- Extra letter "s"
This was where here instincts told her to get in her car and start driving. -- Her, not here.
A ragged group of people was approaching, the nearer ones breaking into a run. -- Were, not was.
A sigh. "This choice, unfortunately, can't be a conscious one. You either admit the possibility into your rational mind or you do not. This is the best I can offer. So please, Chloe, rest." -- Not sure what you actually meant to say here. If you mean her mind has to make the decision while still sleeping, or if you meant she'd have to make a rational choice while awake? If the former, then "can't be a conscious one" is okay, but take out the word "rational" in the next line. If the latter, change "conscious" to "subconscious" and keep the word "rational". They rather contradict each other ( ... )
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