someone please critique my LIT rough draft. i need help.

[xxel_scorchoxx]

A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away…There lived the greatest hero in the history of the universe. His name was Luke Skywalker. Luke Skywalker is the splitting image of the literary archetype epic hero. He is a hero because he faces a tragedy that changes his life forever, he is courageous, and he is very gifted

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[silver_scars]

Splitting image should be "spitting image"

It looks prety good, but email it to me and I'll make more if you want. kayjaym@gmail.com

[scoobydoosocks]

A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away…There lived the greatest hero in the history of the universe. His name was Luke Skywalker. Luke Skywalker is the spitting image of the literary archetype epic hero. He faces a tragedy that changes his life forever. He is also courageous and very gifted

[xxel_scorchoxx]

i know.. i fucked up a lot on like names and stuff cuz i did it really late last night. but i fixed a lot of them today. but yeah it sucks. thanks for the help though!

[sweetdevotchka]

it doesn't suck love, for not ever seeing star wars in my life it gave me a good idea of what it's about, but the advice i would give is to make it longer, keep all of the same content, but strech it out further and describe things more vividly so it seems more colorful and attractive

i loooove you!