Counting Crops in the Scarecrows Den

[xxheartxcorexx]

Counting Crops in the Scarecrows Den

Road mads never sell the enterprise of less and less,
the farmer creates an underground to fullfill desires.
Hidden beyond the fields of folks feinding for a fight,
opening the road but only with dirt and a retrieving sunset.

Foxes red eyes match the blood-shed in this mood-elevator,
the smile of the scarecrow sends

Comments

[16_miles]

"Distillation of a dream in the heartland / Becomes a drink for the soul in this crystal city."
Just about the best line I've read in a very long time. Good job, I'm very glad you're back to writing. :)

[saltinurwounds]

the symbolism is very strong
i think the last 2 lines stand out the most
your words flow very well
you def need to continue writing...

[anonymous]

fresh and interesting extended metaphor -- i like "mood-elevator" and "distillation of dreams." powerful ending, clarifies the symbolism.

[anonymous]

this is pretty good. not what im used to when i read poetry, but its alright.
you sound sad.