Comments | xxzutarafanxx: You only got one shot...so make it count.

xxzutarafanxx

You only got one shot...so make it count.

Apr 14, 2010 21:22

You may never get that moment again!! Well....Here's a oneshot for y'all! If you liked this, check out my other stuff!!

ignore the read more one....

( A moment of doubt. )

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Comments 7

jennibare April 24 2010, 23:30:19 UTC

Not bad my dear, not bad. I loved the son, very cute. Although I think it would be more believable if he were say 5 rather than 3. 3yo's don't quite have the communication skills that this little guy had. But either way, he was adorable and very precocious just like a little boy would be (I have an 8yo so I know first hand ^_ ( ... )

xxzutarafanxx April 25 2010, 19:22:47 UTC

Thanks for the indepth review, I really appreciate it sooo much and agfree 100% with what your saying! Typos and speechmarks being in the wrong place I hate! I.m so bad at checking my own stuff it's sad but I am definately gonna work on that! As to the whole three years old thing...well it's obvious that I don't hang around with kids much..haha..but yeah I think I might change that.....thanks!

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xxzutarafanxx April 25 2010, 19:24:08 UTC

THANKS FOR READING BUDDY!!!!

Yeah I had read so many Zutara dream fanfics and decided to have a go at it.....

Thanks again..

sableambiguity April 25 2010, 03:14:12 UTC

I got all into it and then it was a dream! Dx

I think the main thing is just the mechanics of it. Clean those up, pay more attention to punctuation, and a few mispellings (like "disorientated" isn't a word, it would be "disoriented"). Once you get all of that polished - a good reason to have a beta - then the rest flows pretty well. I enjoyed it as a story although I do agree with Jen, a few parts seem kind of rushed compared to others where you take a lot of time. The concept, however, is lovely. <3

xxzutarafanxx April 25 2010, 19:28:24 UTC

Awwwww! Thanks so much for reading it, I really appreciate it!! Yeah I fail at checking over my stuff....it really is quite sad but I am working on it. Glad you like it though....:D

lynny17 April 25 2010, 04:46:48 UTC

I will tell you now that I'm horrible at this but here goes ( ... )

xxzutarafanxx April 25 2010, 19:31:53 UTC

Thanks so much for reading it!! And you are a fantastic reviewer!!! I now see the whole "he is a bit old to be a three year old" now that you mentioned it...but I gues it just makes it so very obvious that I don't hang out withh kids much huh....

Anywhoo...yeah...typos and such...I so fail...I mean spellcheck help but still. I really should get a beta or something...

Anyway, thanks again for RnR-ing! You're a pal!!