While I get Megatron wants to humiliate Will... this just doesn't quite fit w/ the tone you've previously set - altho it's a nice AU-ish crack piece :)
Thank you very much. I'll set on correcting the scene. And I think I'll post a parody to my own work with this part included. But could you please tell me if you liked the erst of the fic itself?
Oh very much so - Lennox is quite tough (you have to be, as well as borderline (or worse) insane, to be SpecOps). But everyone has their limits, and Megatron has no doubt made a career out of finding them, as well as the more-direct approach of ass-kicking & spark-killing.
And Sam resonates well too, particularly with that he ISN'T a *trained* solider, but a young man thrust into something beyond his ken. And more so w/ current/recent events in Con-land.
Overall, other than this last crack-y interlude, I've got no complaints. You touch on a decidedly dark side of life (and TF war) - but given the Decepticons' limited regard for non-warriors, and ingrained power-plays, it works. On one hand, Frenzy & Barricade could be false, but general consensus (which I subscribe to) is that they could easily turn for or against the human-allies - humans are weaker physicaly, but thanks to Lennox, Sam & co., are realizing that is the only real way we're weaker. Their spirit/spark is as strong or more so than many Mechs. And being the low-men on
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Thank you. Will you do me the honor of being my new beta? Also about that, I need your advice. 1) I made the Decepticons lousy drunks, and undisciplined. Actually, the whole drinking was Will attempt to cover for his escape. (You'll see it later). 2) Things will get darker, as you love them. But, what do you call in English the zero-sense tanks? (I'm not UK, US or Osborn). 3) Did you like the 'mini-me' cannon?
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But could you please tell me if you liked the erst of the fic itself?
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And Sam resonates well too, particularly with that he ISN'T a *trained* solider, but a young man thrust into something beyond his ken. And more so w/ current/recent events in Con-land.
Overall, other than this last crack-y interlude, I've got no complaints. You touch on a decidedly dark side of life (and TF war) - but given the Decepticons' limited regard for non-warriors, and ingrained power-plays, it works. On one hand, Frenzy & Barricade could be false, but general consensus (which I subscribe to) is that they could easily turn for or against the human-allies - humans are weaker physicaly, but thanks to Lennox, Sam & co., are realizing that is the only real way we're weaker. Their spirit/spark is as strong or more so than many Mechs. And being the low-men on ( ... )
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Also about that, I need your advice.
1) I made the Decepticons lousy drunks, and undisciplined. Actually, the whole drinking was Will attempt to cover for his escape. (You'll see it later).
2) Things will get darker, as you love them. But, what do you call in English the zero-sense tanks? (I'm not UK, US or Osborn).
3) Did you like the 'mini-me' cannon?
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