Comments | yamitoyoru: Summer rain

yamitoyoru

Summer rain

Mar 05, 2010 19:14

Title: Summer rain
Pairing: RenIchi
Genre: Romance/General
Rating: K
Words: 402
Warning: fluff; poetic; and so much in so little words,
A/N: Made from leftover notes from Me and my shinigami boyfriend (that never came to life, became something else). Summer is still far away (it's March and it's snowing here again! Again!), but that doesn't mean you can ( Read more... )

fic, abarai renji, bleach, kurosaki ichigo

Comments 8

writerx75 March 5 2010, 23:42:44 UTC

This was completely beautiful. You made me smile and took my breath away.

I love the way you paint such a mental picture with what you write, and the way you move from the rain washing Ichigo clean and his thoughts about that to thinking about how Renji saw it. So lovely and evocative. Thanks so much for posting this!

yamitoyoru March 6 2010, 10:54:46 UTC

I'm really happy you liked it since till the very end I didn't know whether I'm satisfied with it and if it's even worth posting. I'm still trying to get re-used to writing RenIchi xD.

It was meant to make the reader smile so I'm really glad I achieved my goal ^^.

Thank you for the lovely comment!

spikykun March 6 2010, 12:11:34 UTC

Squee, it's you ^^

It was really beautiful and touching, I don't know how else to explain it. I loved Ichigo standing there and letting the rain was over him to be purified, but then saying he wouldn't change a thing. It was so... romantic, in a sense. All those little touches, like the raindrops caressing his skin, really made the fic work for me.
And then to find out he was doing it for Renji? Like, that whole last paragraph, about what it all meant for Renji, was exquisite. Of course I grinned stupidly. They are so fucking good for each other :D

OKAY NOW BRB reading it for the third time

yamitoyoru March 6 2010, 16:23:00 UTC

Haha, yeah. It's me. I knew I'd hear from you. =P

I was all "I hope spiky will like it." while typing it down so I'm all grin and happiness that you did like it ^^.

I had a clear image of Ichigo standing outside in the rain in my head. He had the fresh-out-of-bed look, most probably because he slipped out of his bedroom as soon as he noticed that it's raining outside, leaving Ren snoring in bed. It gave me that feeling of sleepy warmth I tried to convey here. Though I don't know if I succeeded on the sleepy factor. =P

my_imaginating March 8 2010, 16:44:37 UTC

It was so lovely... I'm almost at a loss for words. It makes me feel so warm... I feel all the love Ichigo feels for Renji in the image of infinite raindrop kisses. Haha, smiling stupidly now.

Now I'll probably never look at the rain and NOT think of this. Haha. Thanks. :)

yamitoyoru March 8 2010, 16:52:23 UTC

I'm glad the warmth and smile are contagious. *bows*

Thank you!

ganja_chan June 5 2010, 22:01:15 UTC

Awww :) thanks for rec-ing me this, you were right about the feeling of warmth in this fic. And BTW the smell of summer rain is the smell of days when you just hang around doing nothing and don't have to worry about exams, lol :D

About the fic itself, I really liked how you put Renji's background story in there. And the love between them was almost sparkling off of the screen. Really, a beautiful piece :)

*gives many cookies!*

yamitoyoru June 6 2010, 11:02:43 UTC

Indeed it is! :D Though I wonder if we'll get any real summer rain this year. Either way I want it to be summer break already!

You're welcome. I'm really glad that you liked it! If you eve feel like it I've got some Ura/Ichi one-shots that are mostly in the ROmance/Humor genre ;;>_>. XD

*noms cookies*