Comments | yazzigazzi: Envy (Zacharias Smith/HP)

yazzigazzi

Envy (Zacharias Smith/HP)

Jul 19, 2008 10:44

It’s not envy because he’s not jealous (Zacharias Smith/HP)

Title: It’s not envy because he’s not jealous
Author: yazzigazzi
Rating: G
Prompt: #23 Envy
Word Count: ~450

Warnings: Angst, unrequited, hint to H/D (is that a warning?)

Beta: Cheryl Dyson (love!)

Summary: Every day Zach tells himself it is not pure, green envy that he feels ( Read more... )

harry/zacharias, one-shot, ficlet, 100quills

Comments 7

yazzigazzi July 19 2008, 09:53:03 UTC

Wow, my first comment! *showers you with cookies*
Yes, lol, I just couldn't help hinting at D/H (I'm a helpless D/H shipper)... so, thank you so much! I'm really sorry about the cut or rather the absence of it. Glad you liked it!=)

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yazzigazzi July 20 2008, 07:53:08 UTC

Thank you! ... again. Aw, you're too kind=] I have yet another finished Zacharry (honestly, no idea how the ship would be called) one shot which is a bit longer... I'll post it soon. Actually I started writing HP fics about two years ago (but only Dramiones (I'm over that now though(lol))) but I got stuck and haven't updated for a year (yes I hate myself too). So, anyways, sorry to bother you:D I'll try to write more from now on. *huggles*

lavillanueva July 20 2008, 01:49:35 UTC

Aw, hon! *hugs* This was really good, especially for a first piece. I think you have a strong grip on how to portray emotion using outside cues (i.e., showing not telling) and an instinct for storytelling. And as an avid H/D shipper, myself, I love the little hints of H/D in there.

Would you mind if I made a suggestion, from one newbie to another? You're trying to use lj cuts - and that's great - but you're doing them in the "rich text" box. If you want to use a cut by writing in the code, switch to html. It's in the post page, to the upper right hand corner.

yazzigazzi July 20 2008, 08:09:00 UTC

Oh thank you! So much praise coming from YOU (I absolutely adore your writing), has me thinking: hell, yeah, if SHE says so I'm one hell of an author!:D No, seriously, it means a lot to me. I'll post another one soon. About the lj cut... you were the one who noticed my silent cry for help:D (thank you) aaand I just tried to do what you said but for some reason it still won't work. I'm putting the between summary and story but... I don't know. However, thanks for the comment and the help. xx

yazzigazzi July 20 2008, 10:49:10 UTC

oh, now it worked!:D thanks again!

dirty_darella July 20 2008, 10:19:19 UTC

Yay, you wrote a... what would it be called, Zarry?

lol, great story, so emotionally powerful.

I still need to write a Zarry one of these days...

yazzigazzi July 20 2008, 10:48:04 UTC

No matter how small the las line was... I'll never forget;) You def HAVE to! Well, I've always been calling it Zacharry but Zarry will do just fine I think. :) It's not a big ship so I think you can call it whatever you like (lol). Thank you for your reviews on both fics! I'm doing the happy dance right now...