Koujuuro is fantastic to read about, and watch, and your other characters are just so seriously fabulous that it's hard to take. Too much awesome to handle, bbcakes.
Having played with and watched your Kojuurou for awhile, and having initially enjoyed him, I feel like I shouldn't hold back on my concerns any longer
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3) You are continuously emasculating him where he is taking on a very co-dependent role instead of the independent warrior that Masamune trusts with protecting his back with. I understand there have been character losses that have gravely affected Kojuurou in the time period that he's been on Atia, but considering the fact that they understand this and know that people come and go, should Kojuurou's personality become so affected to the point where he's hardly the man he should be
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In Kojuurou's latest post as well as Mitsunari's post, I don't see him as someone who would concern himself with taking revenge on Mitsunari over tending to his lord after he had been gravely injured. It seems like a selfish and unwarranted act, and in the anime, we see that Kojuurou is quite the opposite. He is someone marked by complete and total selflessness, so there is no reason for him to attempt to fight Masamune's battles for him. He also knows that Masamune will never grow strong if he ends up defeating everyone who has ever harmed him. He would understand that the battle is Masamune's alone to fight and finish and would urge him to get stronger instead of completely holding him back by undertaking the task himself. He knows it is purpose to support Masamune and not to do anything for him, which is why it was understandable that Masamune's reaction would be anger and insult
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Please note that while this seems like a lot, I think the above all comes down to one common problem; right now Kojuurou is being played without direction or a purpose, and I think that you could really benefit from re-evaluating the character and his relationships (both in canon and in Amat) and determining what you want to do for him from here on out. Both your long-term goals and your short-term goals regarding his character could be examined, because these are only problems I've seen happening in the past few months and I think that with work and effort, he can regain the direction he had when you first began writing him. Your writing in general is still wonderful and his introspection is still there and on, but it's his actions that have been disconnected from both his canon goals and behaviour, and his castmates.
If there's something I'm missing, such as some OOC discussion between you and castmates mentioned, then please feel free to let me know. Thank you for your time!
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Koujuuro is fantastic to read about, and watch, and your other characters are just so seriously fabulous that it's hard to take. Too much awesome to handle, bbcakes.
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If there's something I'm missing, such as some OOC discussion between you and castmates mentioned, then please feel free to let me know. Thank you for your time!
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