Prompt Post - Part Eight [CLOSED TO NEW PROMPTS]

[yj_anon]

THIS PART IS NOW CLOSED. YOU CAN CONTINUE POSTING FILLS, BUT PLEASE PROMPT ALL NEW THINGS HERE.
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"glad my team's not that close"

[anonymous]

This quote and the prompt above about the lack of comments on Wally's cast got me thinking...

Other than the relationships that are actively being developed, we don't actually see the team being very close. Sure, Artemis calls them her family, but I'd like to see some ways in which they're still in that new, "I don't know you well enough to really be comfortable and friendly" mode, or even "I just work with them, they aren't my friends" mode. It can be awkwardness, it can be full-out fighting. Just, show some of the team dealing with the wrinkles of getting to know each other.

Maybe 5+1, with the 1 being the one time they all got along? Can be pairings, gen, or OT6.

Re: "glad my team's not that close"

[anonymous]

This can make for an excellent gen fic.

Re: "glad my team's not that close"

[anonymous]

Ooh. Me likes.

Re: "glad my team's not that close" Fill part 1

[anonymous]

I'm not sure if this is what you wanted but I'll give it a shot

Re: "glad my team's not that close" Fill part 2

[anonymous]

Connor and Wally glared at Robin from across the room as the teen fell over laughing at their appearances. M'gann, having gone full Martha Stewart mode, had bought every one new clothes and had attempted to wash them. However she had thrown in Connor's winter stealth clothes with Wally's new red hoodie and white skinny jeans and the entire mess came out pink. After muttering a quick "Hello Megan!" the martian ran off to go buy some bleach, while the rest of the clothes were being cleaned. She had convinced Connor and Wally to change after they worked out and had brought them a change of clothing

Re: "glad my team's not that close" Fill part 2

[anonymous]

OP

I like it. A lot. Thank you for the fill!

Constructive criticism (if you don't mind): Caps-locking tends to distract from, rather than emphasize, the dialogue. Good dialogue (and this is good dialogue) can stand alone, without the extra bells and capitals. (This could just be a personal preference, though.)

It also felt a little bit rushed. Perhaps it was just the lack of extra spacing, but slowing it down a bit would have benefited the fill as a whole.

That said, you did really well of using actions (glaring, sighing) to show their feelings and moods rather than just telling us. (You used glaring a lot, perhaps too much, but the basic concept is still strong.)

I feel bad for all the criticism. The fill really is good, and I like it, and you're awesome for writing it. I'm just better at pointing out negatives than positives.

Re: "glad my team's not that close" Fill part 2

[palmtreesky]

This is lovely, though I completely lost track of all the limbs by the end. =D

Re: "glad my team's not that close"

[anonymous]

Hope ya enjoy the fill...that is if the site kept the fill up I don't see it right now.