Fic: Sharpened Silk

[youcantseeus]

Title: Sharpened Silk
Author: youcantseeus
Characters: Ponclast, Aleeme, Abrimel, Pellaz
Summary:  Thirty years after the horrors that Aleeme experienced at Fulminir, he seeks out Ponclast. (Ponclast/Aleeme, Abrimel/Aleeme).   
Word Count: 9000
Disclaimer:  I do not claim ownership of Wraeththu or any of the characters in this fic. 
Warnings: Not a

Comments

[sildil]

Excellent story, really well told.

[youcantseeus]

Thank you!

[heartofoshun]

Wow! It really did come out well. I love the considerations that you present in the story. A lot of them are about 180 degrees from what I might have imagined, but you are convincing nontheless. I love the way that it is put together and how you continue to peel another unexpected skin off the onion as the story unfolds. I don't know if you intended it or not, but it seems to me like Ponclast, despite his denial, it quite easily manipulated and forced to feel regret and lack of control by both Aleeme and Abrimel and Pellaz as well makes him a lot more uncomfortable than he is willing to admit. Great story.

[youcantseeus]

Yeah, I definitely think that Ponclast is feeling powerless in this fic -- but he doesn't want to admit. He's the type of har who likes to feel in control, I think, but he isn't in control of his own life anymore.

[youcantseeus]

Oh, and thanks for reading.

[mamakinn]

I loved your Ponclast - justifying himself to himself ( how else could he survive). As you said, dark and melancholy but beautifully written - i always wanted Aleeme to have a happy ending, but this rings so true. Thank you.

[youcantseeus]

I always hoped that Aleeme would get a happy ending as well. Maybe he will, with a long road getting there.

Thanks for reading.

[hierokeryx]

i really liked Ponclast's POV, and that is saying something since i'm not much of a Ponclast fan! there was depth to it, and the way you handled Ponclast's feelings and reactions were very interesting and complex.

i'm also generally not much of an Aleeme fan, but not because i don't like him. i always felt he was a little underdeveloped in the books, though i suspect that has more to do with necessary editing (there was so much going on in the story by that point) than with how he was actually written. but this was a really interesting version of him, really nuanced and complex. in the end, his desire to believe in good makes him come off as rather strong, even if it may be as naive as Ponclast thinks. i was really won over.

[youcantseeus]

I always wanted to see Aleeme developed more in the books. There were the seeds of an interesting personality there, but I wanted more. It is always fun to write characters who are given minimal attention in canon -- its halfway between writing original characters and writing regular canon characters. You get a few criteria to work with, but you have to fill in your own speculations about personality as well.

I'm glad this fic won you over. Thanks for reading despite not being too fond of the characters.

[hierokeryx]

i was a little frustrated that Aleeme and Azriel didn't get more attention in the books. considering that what happened to them provided a major source of tension and drama, i would have liked to get to know them better. but, i digress, and i think you've done a great job fleshing Aleeme out here. i really like what you did with him.

i'm not much of a fic writer, but i, too, enjoy speculating on secondary characters or events that aren't fully resolved. there's nothing like a good "what-if" train of thought.

i enjoyed your other fics, so i figured you'd do something interesting here. i wasn't disappointed. i love stories that make me revise my opinions!

[vicki7778999]

Very good!

[youcantseeus]

Thanks!

[vicki7778999]

I came back to read it again because I liked it so much. There are parts that are just so right like Ponclast calling Aleeme my dear and the kitchen knife. You did a really good job.

[youcantseeus]

Thanks, the "my dear" part really creeped me out for some reason -- so I used it.