Prompt #30: Moar Freewriting

[flutttterby]

Hello, all! This is my last post as mod here! Thank you all for making it such a lovely experience :)
And writing2death will do a wonderful job :):)

Picture prompt this week!
Pictures are behind the

Comments

[jetster]

I dunno man:

"There are things you do not know," he said, "But that is fine. You shouldn't worry"
"How is it that I do not know everything?" said I, "For I feel that I do"
"There are things you cannot feel," he said, "And that is also okay. Do not burden yourself with regret"
"How is it that I cannot feel everything?" said I, "For I have experienced all things that can be experienced"
I puzzled
and tangled
and quarrelled
and squandered
and remembered every moment of my life, simultaneously. For every question he made there was another question, for every answer I gave, there was another, but none could satisfy The Gap. The incompleteness of my Self. It burned, a hollow space in a place I could not reach.
"How is it that I still fail to grasp perfection?"
"There are things you cannot be," he said, "Be still, and trouble yourself no more"
And I was still, and though the void ate endlessly, I accepted, and my worries ended.

[writing2death]

I love this to a ridiculous degree. I just thought I'd let you know. The style the dialogue is done in is wonderful. And I really enjoy the structuring in the middle.

Thank you for filling the prompt! :)

[simsbabii12]

My sister always used to love butterflies, even when she turned 13 and she wasn't supposed to like them. She would wear t-shirts with butterflies on them, butterfly earrings, everything. Her favorite, though, was a necklace with a saying about butterfly wishes

[jetster]

Nice piece!

I would have liked a bit more about the whole Jason Matthews wish, it didn't sit right in there, and because of that I wondered momentarily if you stuck it in there to show that you clearly thought about each picture (unlike mine which was prompted by the first picture but only vaguely relates to it :/) I think something about Jason Matthews needs to be included earlier, or something about the character's relationship with her sister a little earlier, rather than the focus solely on building up the character of the sister. Otherwise it sticks out because there's nothing to really introduce the concept, and there's no follow up either.

I love the way you've used the images of the butterflies though, it's really sweet :)

[simsbabii12]

I wrote this in part with another piece in which Jason IS a big character. So I guess, taken out of context, the Jason thing is a little out of place.

The story was all about the sister because of my other piece. Up until the point that the sister dies, nobody knows anything about my character's sister except what the character recounts in memories or dreams. This is meant as the ending scene, so things would seem out of place.

Thanks for your comment anyways, though :)

[flutttterby]

I liked this :)
Thank so much for filling the prompt!

[kramskii]

Prompt: MOAR FREEWRITING [but really, it's about butterflies]
Community: your_scribbles
Title: A grave, so shallow. Maybe? I don't know.
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Really kind of um, how to say... Out there. Possible character death. Hallucinations, if you can find them, and the sad little tale of someone who can't let go.
Authors Notes: Listen to the piano mix of Solitude from FMA and that is that back ground to this. I think it is weird and will probably take you a few times to understand what is being said and what is being heard. I hop you enjoy. Flames will be eaten.

Clicky here- Butterflies