Critique
anonymous
September 15 2006, 15:28:24 UTC
I really like this first paragraph of yours. It is well detailed and well written.
You will find I am horrible at critiquing things, actually. I rather like it. It is, as is all writing, a extension of the writer. I think that perhaps the only real peice of advice I can give is that there is alot of time spent describing every small detail of the cold and how it affects her. This may be a particularly major point or setup for your story though, so it may be just perfect when it is part of the whole. I don't know.
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You will find I am horrible at critiquing things, actually. I rather like it. It is, as is all writing, a extension of the writer. I think that perhaps the only real peice of advice I can give is that there is alot of time spent describing every small detail of the cold and how it affects her. This may be a particularly major point or setup for your story though, so it may be just perfect when it is part of the whole. I don't know.
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