:: the thrill ::

[yourownzero]

New Poem. Let me know what you think.

The Thrill
I was fox-hunting
chasing seeking sleek
swift mysteryious creatures
that eluded me,
when I turned
to find a lame one.
I shot her dead.

EDIT: Updated. More comments please. This could be vitally important.

Comments

[calgal995]

i like it; i can't explain what it is about it that i like...i'll let you know when i find the words.

[anonymous]

i don't really like how it ends... maybe i dont understand about the lame one... maybe 'i shot her dead' is just too abrupt... maybe its supposed to be that way