Comments | yuui_nyanko: Skinny Love

yuui_nyanko

Skinny Love

Apr 25, 2010 15:29

Title: Skinny Love
Characters: Kuro/Fai, Tomoyo, mention of Souma
Anonymous AU (could be Horitsuba, could not be)
Warnings: no spoilers, character death
Rating / Genre: G+ / Angst

( Fai’s arms wrapped around Kurogane’s waist from behind. He had lost so much weight recently that he may as well have not been there at all. )

l:oneshot, c:fai, p:kurofai, u:au, s:tsubasa, c:kurogane, fanfic

Comments 43

aaabb April 25 2010, 22:25:33 UTC

ahh, i new was Fai's funeral! I had the doubt because there was no mantion of anybody speacking o watching Fai... Tomoyo first of all, at the beginning!
The end it's sad--- i can't handle the idea that one of tham can go on without the other.. it would be no life at all, not for them...

yuui_nyanko April 26 2010, 12:43:41 UTC

You're really perceptive xP I tried to be as sneaky-sneaky as I could. Tomoyo not talking to Fai was definitely a giveaway xD

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yuui_nyanko May 2 2010, 20:20:05 UTC

Thank you for reading and commenting ^___^ I'm glad you enjoyed it~!

silvanuyx May 17 2010, 01:22:57 UTC

-wibble- You actually managed to make me cry. Or at least tear up. In any case, congrats. I thought it was Syaoran at first, then Yuui, then the end made me just go ;.; Beautiful piece. I didn't pick up on it until the end. And even then, it was a double take. Then I reread it and went "Oh, lost so much weight he might as well not even be there. -snerk- 'cause he's not". And "ghost of a touch" and... -wibble again-

I'm going to go cry in a corner now. You wrote it very, very well. With all the right little touches that scream Fai and Kurogane. Because it does make sense to me that Kurogane wouldn't quite let Fai go until that point. Not until he had a better good bye. And I'm crying again. Thank you for writing it.

yuui_nyanko May 17 2010, 17:08:05 UTC

Awwwww don't cry! *hugs*

I'm glad you enjoyed it and thankyou for such a nice comment ;w; I got such sadistic pleasure from including those two lines as hidden dramatic irony, you wouldn't believe it xD

d_^ , ^_b kittendisaster May 17 2010, 15:55:56 UTC

You did a fantastic job with this fanfiction. ^^;; I joined just to tell you that, by the way.

Re: d_^ , ^_b yuui_nyanko May 17 2010, 17:11:07 UTC

Thank you very much, I absolutely love to get any feedback you can offer and I really appreciate the effort you went to ^___^ and welcome to LJ! I hpoe you have fun here~

Re: d_^ , ^_b kittendisaster May 18 2010, 01:29:00 UTC

Well, I'm thinking about adding some of my own Kuro/Fai fics up (aren't they technically Kuro/Yuui fics? xD), but I'm a little nervous about it. Almost everyone has such good ones....

Re: d_^ , ^_b yuui_nyanko May 18 2010, 18:28:21 UTC

I suppose they are Kuro/Yuui fics xP I think people tend to carry on referring to the Fai we know as 'Fai' and only call him 'Yuui' or the other way around when both twins are involved...

I understand your nervousness;;; When I first joined LJ I was too scared to post my stuff to comms and such because I didn't think anybody would want to see them, but everyone in the KF comms are so nice and helpful, and there are lots of readers that will give really in-depth critiques if you ask for them. The way I thought of it was; If I never take the chance, I'll never have the opportunity to improve. All of us here are still learning and improving, and that's through the feedback of others :3

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