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Fic :: Sherlock :: The Alley Affair

Nov 13, 2011 09:36

Title: The Alley Affair
Fandom: Sherlock
Pairing: John/Sherlock
Rating: Somewhere on the border between PG-13 and R
Word Count: ~5,200
Summary: It radiated from him, from his hands pressed to the front of John’s trousers, from his lips that teased at John's mouth. Sherlock shook against him with the satisfaction of another case solved.

( The Alley Affair )

john/sherlock, sherlock

Comments 11

eirenical November 13 2011, 16:27:11 UTC

You would post this when I'm halfway through reading your Merlin story because I've finally seen enough of Season 1 to not fear spoilage.

Meanie.

Still... it's a tiny story and it's Sherlock, so I figured, "What's the harm?" Right? Right. Now I want to rewatch all of Sherlock.

Meanie.

*coughs* Anyhoo, obviously, loved it. ^_^ And I see why you were having issues with so much of it being flashback, but this set-up worked beautifully. I love how you managed to keep so much of the flavor and feel of the actual show and your characterizations, as always, are spot-on. And you've captured John's voice perfectly, too. (Have I mentioned how I adored John's half-distracted, mumbliness? Because I do. *_*)

Possibly favorite line of the whole thing?

“Don’t get sloppy just to spite me,” Mycroft hissed suddenly."

*snerts* I love how Mycroft called him out there and insulted him all in one blow. Brilliant. ^_^ I just love Mycroft, period. I also loved how you used him here. The Under-Secretary/Secretary thing was fabulous -- ( ... )

zoicite November 13 2011, 17:22:36 UTC

Oh, whatever, you knew it was coming. ;) And yeah, you really just need to know the characters and basic premise for the Merlin story. Enjoy. ;)

I LOVE JOHN. I didn't actually know i loved Mycroft until I wrote this.

But anyway, yes, thank you for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed!! :D

(I don't know that I agree with that. Hands down pants should not automatically = R. It's not a graphic description - i mean, that bit is 3 sentences long! I don't even directly reference genetalia! - and could easily not be cut for a PG-13 movie, imo, at least not if one of the characters was a different gender. I don't think it would really be misrepresentation to give it an R label either though, at least not in the world of fanfiction.)

livia_bj November 13 2011, 20:02:35 UTC

You had me with the sex in the alley, 'cause I'm a huge fan of sex in the alley.
And then I kept on reading and there was a really nice story behind!
:D
I loved it, every bit of it. Well done :))

zoicite November 14 2011, 10:43:23 UTC

Thank you so much for reading! So glad you enjoyed it! :D

talimenios79 November 14 2011, 11:24:17 UTC

I really enjoyed this.

zoicite November 14 2011, 23:22:16 UTC

Thank you!

silver_cyanne November 19 2011, 00:36:00 UTC

This is lovely and so very them.

zoicite November 19 2011, 03:52:01 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it :D

scarfandjumper March 3 2012, 17:42:19 UTC

Ha! I knew there'd be more amazing fic from you here and I was right!!!! *wibbles* Loved this as much as the other one - you really did a wonderful job with the "John as a case" trope - it felt fresh and right and the happy ending, while expected, was still surprising (and it was utterly sweet and very satisfying emotionally). I also loved Mycroft in this. :)

What a joy to read - another one that goes into my fic folder for re-reading! Thank you so much!!