Convergence, Part 1

Nov 18, 2007 00:56


Kaoru wasn’t easy to carry.  Megumi hadn’t time to do anything about his back, and hugging her to his chest was causing the blistered skin to pull and tug painfully.  God knew what hauling her through the streets was going to do to Sano’s hand.  It was something he wasn’t going to think about.  Wasn’t much point.

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sanity_escape November 17 2007, 17:37:42 UTC
"Ninja is as ninja does..."

*happysquee!glomp*

you've updated! and it's wonderful! and am very much looking forward to the next tidbit ^^

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whiteadelphi November 18 2007, 00:52:00 UTC
Yay! *gllomps* Hopefully not too far away >_> *nails muse to her foot*

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some_scribbles November 17 2007, 19:13:09 UTC
Oh, how I love this story. I will want to print it all out and read it all over again when it's all done.

-Once again, I love how you handle the unveiling of the backstory and relationships between characters. You take just enough of the reader's understanding for granted while unveiling bits and pieces that hint at the necessary connective tissue. It's lovely.

-I've said it before and I'll say it again: your actions sequences are unparalleled. I love how it just unfolds so clearly, like watching a movie, in my mind.

-It's so fun! Squeeeeeeeee!

*cough* Glad you caught your muse!

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whiteadelphi November 18 2007, 00:53:19 UTC
Thank you very much. :D (I say. Again and again and again. Hee. I told you I love your comments.) *hugs*

Yes, I caught it! And it's not getting away again. XD ...I hope.

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redswordheart November 17 2007, 20:17:06 UTC
How can Misao still be alive if she was shot in the head?

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whiteadelphi November 18 2007, 00:55:55 UTC
Must admit, I'm a little amazed that you think she was.

The bullet cracked into the wall by her head.

It took her another moment of stunned silence to realise he’d been shot through the forehead.

Maybe read more carefully next time? Given I'm very meticulous with plot points in general, I'd have hoped you'd know better than to think I'd write something like that. ;)

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redswordheart November 18 2007, 01:00:29 UTC
The part where it said she was shot through the forehead right at the end.

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whiteadelphi November 18 2007, 01:01:10 UTC
...where does it say that?

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gure126 November 17 2007, 21:57:41 UTC
What a wonderful thing to find on a saturday afternoon! As always, it was a delight to read, and I'm glad your muse came to visit. ^_^

I'm hoping the folks on the roof are who I think they are, and am looking forward to the next part!

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whiteadelphi November 18 2007, 01:00:29 UTC
I'm glad it came back to visit too. :D The folks on the roof ... well. It will be made clear eventually *grin* And hopefully soon, if I get my muse to stay put.

Thank you :D

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zig_zag123 November 18 2007, 00:42:09 UTC
Meh, you know what I think, but I'm bored and I thought I'd stop by and say again.

I really enjoy this story. You're making everyone realistic. Misao maybe a ninja, but guns suck for ninja! She was able to take one out with surprise, but two?

I like! I like it a lot!

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whiteadelphi November 18 2007, 01:02:15 UTC
*grin* Well, taking out two guys in an alleyway silently is more Aoshi's line of work, but yeah ...attract the attention of one and you're history. Mwaha!

*loves on Misao* I like writing her so much in this. ^^

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zig_zag123 November 18 2007, 01:05:13 UTC
@_@ Good for you because I can never get her character right. >D So I avoid any plot bunnies that may include her.

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