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zea_taylor

Primus Wept

May 14, 2013 12:11

Title: Primus Wept

'Verse: 2007 movieverse AU

Rating: T/PG-13

Characters: Jazz, Prowl, ensemble.

Warnings: dark fic, major character death, established Jazz/Prowl

Summary:
( There are things that, once heard, cannot be unheard. )

transformers, movieverse, angst, prowl/jazz, fan fiction

Comments 10

playswithworms May 15 2013, 01:25:29 UTC

Aw, geez...well, that will definitely put an end to all the fighting, I guess O_O Powerful and amazing fic, wow.

(Wait, does that mean Hot Spot and TC are the only ones left? Or...if it was just command staff, then the P-bots are all together and ok, whew! and then everyone gets reincarnated as hatchlings and they can raise them together in one big happy non-fighting family and then Primus will stop crying....)

zea_taylor May 18 2013, 18:55:42 UTC

Yup. If anything was going to end the war, it was this - and Jazz has always been responsible for doing what must be done... even when his sanity is drowning in tears.

Hot Spot and TC are just fine, together with the mechs Jazz didn't see the need to "invite" - including the P.Bots. There was reasoning there I might get around to writing up at some point. Either way, with their numbers so small now, the War is well and truly over.

Thanks for commenting :)

rose0mary May 15 2013, 04:40:03 UTC

OUCH!

Well, you did warn us.

And being torn from the side of God would hurt - even if he wasn't crying.
Mourning his children? Wishing to make amends? To restart, and to end the war?
Sad, sad day.

Worse: only Prowl realized how far Jazz had fallen - to what extremes Jazz would go to.
And yet, Prowl fully supports his bondmate - even to death and assured destruction.

As dark as this is, I like. I like alot!

zea_taylor May 18 2013, 18:59:28 UTC

Hello there! Thanks for reading and commenting :) With the exception of Prowl, I don't think either side really appreciated just how strong Jazz is when he has to be - or how brittle that makes him. And eliminating problems is his vocation... and all he and Prowl have left to hold onto. I'm glad you found this and liked it :)

wicked3659 May 19 2013, 01:42:07 UTC

Oh the horrors of war. This is why noone shouldve played God and brought him back. It reminds me of a play i watched once called the apothecary where they got the monkey paw and wished for their loved one returned from the grave only recently dead but never specified how they wanted them back and so the reanimated corpse came knocking at their door. But now at least the fighting has stopped and sparks have a chance at being reborn. Insane or not he did what needed to be done. And I can see why Prowl logically would follow him. It was the quickest and most efficient end any of them could have hoped for. Very dark very well done!

zea_taylor May 23 2013, 16:00:04 UTC

Thank you - and sorry for my slow reply! I hadn't thought about the Monkey's Paw, but I know of the story, and you're right - you should always be careful what you wish for.

cmdrtekk May 20 2013, 03:35:46 UTC

Well done, well written.

zea_taylor May 23 2013, 16:00:18 UTC

Thank you! Glad you liked it.

ext_210694 July 11 2013, 22:24:22 UTC

Wow... Really powerful, if very dark. And whether you meant to or not, I liked the ambiguity -- did Jazz really hear Primus and come up with the correct response, or is he just mad, and Prowl in love and broken enough by the war to believe him?

(personally, I'll go with the first option. There's hope that way. But the potential second interpretation gives it an edge.)

zea_taylor July 15 2013, 18:25:57 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it, if that's the right term. I'm not sure anyone can say precisely what's going through Jazz's mind. It's just that he's always been a mech to do what he believes he has to!

Thanks for commenting - it's always lovely to know what people think :)