What a nice ending. :) The action scene was nicely done with Prowl's and Jazz's roles as a great conclusion to the whole thing.
The best part though was when both of them told the Autobots to chill. That was classic. :) Smokey telling Sides that he now had permission to perform pranks was just the icing on the cake. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the ending - it's always hard to know if you're getting the balance right when writing these things, but the scene with Jazz and Prowl scolding their friends kind of wrote itself :) Thank you for your comments here and earlier - it's great to get the feedback, and I've been pleased to see you and others enjoying it.
The Autobots' overcompensation for their prior indifference to Jazz and Prowl is very sweet.
Red Alert’s helm fins were sparking, his eyes following the dust trail out of the valley. “It’s all in a good cause,” the Security Director muttered to himself, words clearly audible across the fading roar of high performance engines. “It’s worth it.”
Poor Red!
Jazz grinned. “I feel a game of Rate the Decepticon Assault comin’ on.”
Prowl's "training material" *sporfle* And Prowl/Jazz nudges, d'awwww <33333333333
I loved all the trust and teamwork going on in the dust up with the Decepticons, just lovely! Prowl and Jazz have totally got this under control, yo.
Hee - Sideswipe has been trying to behave himself? Aw, how sweet, lol, but yeah, bored Jazz is a thing to be avoided at all costs! XD It's all gonna be ok, Red, it'll all be fine *pats shoulder*
Hello there! Thanks - I'm glad you've liked it and I'm sorry I've not been able to reply to all your comments. The LJ breakage has been most irritating.
I got a *sporfle* out of you - yay! It's been good fun posting this story and seeing how people react. I've been gratified that most people seem to have enjoyed the story. Thanks again for commenting :)
I went prowling *cough* through your tags after I read your prowlxjazz comm challenge response and I think I fell in love with this story.
The way each chapter is "told" by a different character works wonderfully and your characterization is spot-on. Bluestreak's confusion, Starscream's bitterness, Smokescreen's perceptiveness and plotting, Prowl's and Jazz's sadness and defensiveness really made the story come alive. And everyone's guilt afterwords was sweet and funny. Emphasizing how capable (and dangerous) the two mechs are, and how their friends perceived them as strangers was very interesting and believable - and it made me want to hug everybody. For a while I was afraid that Ratchet and his team wouldn't pull through, but the cure and it's effects made everything better without being a deus ex machina. I enjoyed the whole experience; thank you for sharing it! :)
Thank you so much for commenting! It's always great to hear that someone's enjoyed a story, and Yellow Ribbon was a tricky one to write and get right. I'm delighted that you liked it - some of the chapters here (Starscream's for example) just wrote themselves, but others were harder and it's always a challenge to keep everyone in character. I'm glad you felt that worked, and that I kept you guessing about what was going to happen.
It's good to know that you felt the cure and ending worked too. I did worry that the cure came too easy, but there was a limit to how long the situation was going to stretch out and it was a tricky balance.
In any case, thanks again for taking the time and trouble to leave a comment - I really do appreciate the feedback :)
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The best part though was when both of them told the Autobots to chill. That was classic. :) Smokey telling Sides that he now had permission to perform pranks was just the icing on the cake. Thanks for sharing.
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Red Alert’s helm fins were sparking, his eyes following the dust trail out of the valley. “It’s all in a good cause,” the Security Director muttered to himself, words clearly audible across the fading roar of high performance engines. “It’s worth it.”
Poor Red!
Jazz grinned. “I feel a game of Rate the Decepticon Assault comin’ on.”
A very amusing notion.
I like the way this ends. It works very well.
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I've really appreciated your reviews throughout - thank you for commenting!
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Prowl's "training material" *sporfle* And Prowl/Jazz nudges, d'awwww <33333333333
I loved all the trust and teamwork going on in the dust up with the Decepticons, just lovely! Prowl and Jazz have totally got this under control, yo.
Hee - Sideswipe has been trying to behave himself? Aw, how sweet, lol, but yeah, bored Jazz is a thing to be avoided at all costs! XD It's all gonna be ok, Red, it'll all be fine *pats shoulder*
Love it! \o/ You do know how to spin a tale :D
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I got a *sporfle* out of you - yay! It's been good fun posting this story and seeing how people react. I've been gratified that most people seem to have enjoyed the story. Thanks again for commenting :)
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The way each chapter is "told" by a different character works wonderfully and your characterization is spot-on. Bluestreak's confusion, Starscream's bitterness, Smokescreen's perceptiveness and plotting, Prowl's and Jazz's sadness and defensiveness really made the story come alive. And everyone's guilt afterwords was sweet and funny. Emphasizing how capable (and dangerous) the two mechs are, and how their friends perceived them as strangers was very interesting and believable - and it made me want to hug everybody. For a while I was afraid that Ratchet and his team wouldn't pull through, but the cure and it's effects made everything better without being a deus ex machina. I enjoyed the whole experience; thank you for sharing it! :)
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It's good to know that you felt the cure and ending worked too. I did worry that the cure came too easy, but there was a limit to how long the situation was going to stretch out and it was a tricky balance.
In any case, thanks again for taking the time and trouble to leave a comment - I really do appreciate the feedback :)
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