Fic: Just Conflict Me (3/?)

[zenelly]

Title: Just Conflict Me
Pairing: Seifer/Hayner
Disclaimer: KH isn't mine, isn't mine.
Rating: NC-17. And yes, I do mean in this chapter too.
Summary: Sometimes, Hayner presses into his own bruises just to feel the little sweet burst it gives him. Sometimes, Seifer does it for him. Most of the time, Seifer just gives him the bruises to begin with.

Comments

[eraserfish]

ALL THESE EMOTIONS I CANNOT COMPREHEND WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO ME?
(ALSO HI MERRY CHRISTMAS)

[eraserfish]

Re-read, like, four times and will re-read again after this and you are amazing, I hope you know that. Also, I love that ending to bits because it's painful and I want more (you've turned me into a masochist!!!) and new favorite fic of forever. I have no idea what else I can say because, seriously, I'm trying to find the words but there's nothing, so yes, I love you, Merry Christmas and this is the greatest Christmas gift ever, just saying. \o/ ♥

[zenelly]

HI HI HAPPY CHRISTMAS HOW ARE YOU BB

I'm sorry to leave it at such a terrible point, honestly, becuse it's not done, and this part is going to be super-crucial to the rest of that happenings! *hughug* I try my best to deliver masochism fic on holidays, what can I say. ^^

[eraserfish]

I AM GREAT NOW \o/ HOW ABOUT YOU?

I honestly love how you ended it! I love painful, shocking cliffhangers. Can't wait to see the rest! akjsrkalser /clings to you ♥

[theplumtomato]

oh god oh god oh god Seifer you little fuck, why did you have to wait for the last day?! All of my fucking feelings, I'm in a glass case of emotion, holy fuck. The Struggle and the shower and fuck fuck fuck, Zene, you bring out my perviness and my sads and my goddamn anticipation because Marluxia is the shit and Master? Yes fucking please.

I love Marly. Him and Dem get paired with everyone in KH, they're so fluid. I've never seen him paired with Hayner, but goddamn he would be a sadist, he would, and now I'm so excited that it hurts.

In summation: ajdnspanshducnsosudnckfywbapamdjcu hnnnnnnnnnnnngh more more more

<3<3<3<3<3 ilu so much bb <3

[zenelly]

bwahahahahah, it's because Seifer's a reluctant little fuck and he enjoys prolonging the torture (really it's because that's how long it took him to get fed up with it all). I try to bring out your perv, bb! It makes reading this much easier because then I don't feel like the only perv who likes this.

Marly is the shit when it comes to kinky people I can toss in with everyone. I needed someone who liked being in control. And Hayner needs someone who... well. You'll see. ^^

♥♥♥♥♥♥ ILU2 BB so much you don't even know *hughughug*

[besinfection]

O_O
You had to make this story awesome.
Couldn't spot any typos, and this story made me fangirl so much inside. Keep up the good work!

[zenelly]

*grins* I'm glad you like it! I just couldn't let them go ahead and get together without tearing them apart first. ^^

Just Conflict Me 3

[kyoxha]

With the sadness of Hayner leaving and the sadness of close friends, i was wonderinging how by the time Hayner got to Struggle practice, he was going to react to Seifer. "HA" on my first reaction to Seifer telling him to pay attention. Even I FELT he made a mistake this time ;p. lolz

Re: Just Conflict Me 3

[zenelly]

Ah, see, I view the parenthesis as a sort of literary tool, a separation of sorts. If I was going to rewrite it in another way, it would be with dashes separating it, because it's less of a side-note from the author and more of a side-note from Hayner. Like this:

"It barely eases at the constant contact his friends are giving him -and Hayner has never been a tactile person, but this is just too much to handle without grounding himself on someone else and Pence and Olette have always been so solid."

But the parenthesis can be used to separate whole sentances instead of just part of them. It's mostly just a stylistic thing that I found I really like.

Thank you for the comments and notes!

Just Conflict Me 3

[kyoxha]

Ah sou. I see. I have learned something, then. Good.
Personally, the dashes are far more awesome. Idk what's with us people who get side tracked with parenthesis vs dashes; we are a particular brand of crazy. Please forgive us

~ciao
PS, i WAS thinking school on the male bonding bit. Probably due to how RANDOM and violent (not rly) that scene was/how we are irl. har har :)

Re: Just Conflict Me 3

[zenelly]

Ahaha, no apologies necessary. It's a style thing that not all people enjoy.

[escagirluk]

BDSM of any sort is generally squick for me, but you make it work for me so far. Am sort of starting to ship Seifer/Hayner.

Anyways, hope you update soon!

[zenelly]

Wow, I am super pleased that you are reading this if BDSM squicks you! <3<3 thanks for reading this!

[escagirluk]

Seems to depend on the fandom, the pairing, and the author.