oh gosh I love this. I love the little connections, I love the single sentences about Zacharias, I love the characterizations, I love that pansy is not subtle.
Eep, thank you so much! I'd done a lot of thinking about this one (except for how it would end, which is why it just sort of... goes away.) as far as characterizations and everything goes.
This is so...ksjlkfjd. I can't pinpoint why I like it so much which really makes this a horrible comment but oh well. The whole apathetic air to it, the COFFEE, the Neville/Pansy...oh I am dead. <333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
Zacharias sits on the floor, bends one leg over the other, takes a calming breath, and feels his hips align with the shifting of the earth’s crust.
That... is the part that really took my breath away. This whole piece was really beautiful, full of wonderful little twists and turns and bends. But I'm always honest with my reviews, and I've got to say, the end lacks a little... something. It seems to trail off sort of sort of despondantly? For such a powerful beginning, the end just seems a little weak to me. Other than that, it was just lovely and smooth, and the sexual scenes were quite delectable. Good job!
Yep. I agree. I had it in my mind and then... I don't know what happened. I just couldn't get it out how I wanted it to get out. That's what I get for leaving the end until, well... the end. *d'oh*
ONE DAY (like, in a year, probably) I'm planning on polishing up all these fics and reposting them somewhere, so I'll make sure to keep this comment in mind when I get to this one. :)
Thank you for the constructive criticism! I LOVE IT! <333
Thank you so much! I love the coffee, too. It doesn't make nearly as big of an appearance in fic as it should, considering most of us LIVE off of it. ;)
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Your writing is gorgeous. :X
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I'd done a lot of thinking about this one (except for how it would end, which is why it just sort of... goes away.) as far as characterizations and everything goes.
Thank you so much, lovely! ♥
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This is so...ksjlkfjd. I can't pinpoint why I like it so much which really makes this a horrible comment but oh well. The whole apathetic air to it, the COFFEE, the Neville/Pansy...oh I am dead. <333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
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Awww, no... thank you!
Aha, it does sound apathetic, doesn't it? That wasn't my original intent, but I'm glad it works. <3333
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That... is the part that really took my breath away. This whole piece was really beautiful, full of wonderful little twists and turns and bends. But I'm always honest with my reviews, and I've got to say, the end lacks a little... something. It seems to trail off sort of sort of despondantly? For such a powerful beginning, the end just seems a little weak to me. Other than that, it was just lovely and smooth, and the sexual scenes were quite delectable. Good job!
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Yep. I agree. I had it in my mind and then... I don't know what happened. I just couldn't get it out how I wanted it to get out. That's what I get for leaving the end until, well... the end. *d'oh*
ONE DAY (like, in a year, probably) I'm planning on polishing up all these fics and reposting them somewhere, so I'll make sure to keep this comment in mind when I get to this one. :)
Thank you for the constructive criticism! I LOVE IT! <333
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I love the coffee and the Pansy. PANSY! I loved Pansy. She was so bitchy and do-what-I-tell-you and OMG NEVILLE/PANSY! <3333 So great!
I like how at the beginning, I had no fucking clue what was going and it all came together at the end, wrapping things into a tight package.
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I'm glad you stayed through until the end. <3333
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...I make up new words to express the joy over your fic. Honestly, it's creepy.
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Thank you.
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