xD That story isn't about me. it's a gay romance about two guys in high school and the one falls for the other but the other surrounds himself by people to fill the void of emotional disconnect. The one in love goes unnoticed by the other even after he confesses his feeling, so imagine a coffee shop scenario. The one who is in love, Alexander aka Alex, is at the coffee shop buying a drink when strolls in the one incapable of love, Brayden, surrounded by his usual posy of wanna be cool kids. the group of faceless kids snicker and gawk at Alex and he turns to leave but hears them call him a "faggot". so he turns back and enraged spits venom at them like a viper, making them all take a step back. then he turns his sights on Brayden and asks why he wouldn't stick up for Alex. Brayden being the douchebag closet gay he is snickers and asks "Why would I, I don't even know you." So that piercing Alex like a dagger he just explodes and emotions over flows from his being and that's what you get up there... '- '
How was that at all cute? This was basically a one shot short about Alex's first love. but there is more Alex stories to come. happier Alex stories hopefully. lol
my thoughts...lawlie99October 16 2013, 03:55:47 UTC
As I fish out a quarter and the cashier thanks me and reaches for a lid, I hear the door chime and a group of boys come in behind me and to the side. Angie is on the other side of the door, and from how I'm standing, I can see her eyes go wide
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Re: my thoughts...lawlie99October 16 2013, 03:57:36 UTC
"You think you know all about me, don't you? You think you've got me all figured out. You hear that I'm gay and your mind goes from seeing me as a human being to a dirty little cocksucker. To a freak from a person. You don't know anything about me
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Re: my thoughts...zombiehorrorfoxOctober 17 2013, 16:04:53 UTC
other than the occasional spelling errors, I adored this piece!!! It burned with passion and anger and so many emotions flew off the screen and into my heart, I was beside this guy burning with rage whilst he yelled at those no balled bastards! You have made your beta so proud!
p.s. you don't need to use descriptive words like I do, because your characters have so much depth they paint the scene around themselves.
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it's a gay romance about two guys in high school and the one falls for the other but the other surrounds himself by people to fill the void of emotional disconnect. The one in love goes unnoticed by the other even after he confesses his feeling, so imagine a coffee shop scenario. The one who is in love, Alexander aka Alex, is at the coffee shop buying a drink when strolls in the one incapable of love, Brayden, surrounded by his usual posy of wanna be cool kids. the group of faceless kids snicker and gawk at Alex and he turns to leave but hears them call him a "faggot". so he turns back and enraged spits venom at them like a viper, making them all take a step back. then he turns his sights on Brayden and asks why he wouldn't stick up for Alex. Brayden being the douchebag closet gay he is snickers and asks "Why would I, I don't even know you." So that piercing Alex like a dagger he just explodes and emotions over flows from his being and that's what you get up there... '- '
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This was basically a one shot short about Alex's first love. but there is more Alex stories to come. happier Alex stories hopefully. lol
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It burned with passion and anger and so many emotions flew off the screen and into my heart, I was beside this guy burning with rage whilst he yelled at those no balled bastards! You have made your beta so proud!
p.s. you don't need to use descriptive words like I do, because your characters have so much depth they paint the scene around themselves.
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