Particles of Light, Chapter 18: Just Give Me A Moment

Aug 31, 2008 01:03


Title: Chapter 18 - Just Give Me  A Moment
Rating: M
Disclaimer: I don't own anything, no harm is intended

Chapter 18 Here! )

fic, life, dani reese, charlie crews

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omnie August 31 2008, 09:05:30 UTC
Oh, wow. I can't even quote anything because the whole chapter's fantastic. I love how deeply you get into the characters' heads.

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15lbpurebunny August 31 2008, 17:34:56 UTC
Wow, thanks. That so nice!

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grimorie August 31 2008, 13:12:21 UTC
An update and what an update. Your descriptions are so vivid and I like your turns of phrase, especially this:

Knows he’s going to hold her accountable for this, to make her explain it to him with her body, to show him why she came. Why she changed her mind.

That he would hold her accountable because that feels like part of their partnership, that they hold each other accountable, part of the agreement that keeps their partnership going. And then ending it with the night sky and then a mention of the city.

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15lbpurebunny August 31 2008, 17:38:51 UTC
Yay! Glad you liked it. I think that he would really hold her accountable. And, that's what I was going for. A slight role reversal in terms of how he tiptoes around her a lot of the time.

Because, really, I think he knows more about her than he would admit or show unless he really had to. He totally gets what's going on in her head, which is why he wants to mess with her sometimes.

I mean, she's just had a panic attack, she's gone up to her partner's house to do some self-sabotaging bullshit that she knows she'll regret and when she gets there, she ends up getting quite a shock. He's the one in control and he really doesn't let her get away with it.

(Because, um, you know, he's crazy about her.) :-)

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quellthesurface August 31 2008, 16:13:10 UTC
Showing he how hard he is for her, how much he wants her, has wanted her. There’s nobody else in the city. On earth.
Favorite line. For real.

Ooooh! I am so jealous of your skills.
AND you managed to wipe away angry thoughts of eric. ;)

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15lbpurebunny August 31 2008, 20:24:24 UTC
Eric-be-gone!

Yes! My work here is done....

Glad you like it!

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"TBC"...the most beautiful letters in the world! citosol September 2 2008, 19:14:32 UTC
My favourite Charlie is "in control" Charlie^__^.
It's hard for me to think about Dani being in control. Or, better, I love to think that she thinks she is the one in control(never used the words "control" and "think" that much!^___^')when, as the matter of fact, Charlie is the real "master".

(If you hadn't guess it already: wonderful chapter, I LOOOOOOOOOOOVED it!!*___*)

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Re: "TBC"...the most beautiful letters in the world! 15lbpurebunny September 2 2008, 19:37:48 UTC
Hahaha. To me, Dani is always in control, even though Charlie is, too. He just doesn't try to do anything to control her.

But, partnership is all about give and take, no?

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Re: "TBC"...the most beautiful letters in the world! citosol September 2 2008, 19:45:02 UTC
"But, partnership is all about give and take, no?"

Oh, yes, and you're soooo wise...
^_^

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