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[_all_this_love_]

i think my writing gets more and more abstract.

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she'd send him red autumn leaves in white paper envelopes, but by the time he opened them, they were thin and dry and the stems would crack. it grew colder every year and her steps were quick to keep her warm and he laughed at her for wearing fuzzy scarves and jeans with ripped knees.

the city

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[musicfreak213]

mmm...i like it...

[_all_this_love_]

thank youuuu. :o)

[wishiwereemo]

This is probably my favorite of everything I've read by you. Truly fantastic. Some great images and some great ideas. I love it.

[_all_this_love_]

thanks .. . . i definitely appreciate hearing that. i actually had no idea where it was headed when i started it . . .and then i still didn't know where it was headed when i was halfway through it . . .but i kept coming up with new directions, and it just kind of kept going. i wasn't sure how it would come across, i think i was a little afraid that it was so abstract that nobody could really feel much from it . .. since i wasn't sure exactly what to call whatever i was feeling when i wrote it, if that makes sense.

[drzre]

she'd send him red autumn leaves in white paper envelopes = oh my god, goosebumps. everywhere on my body.

and promised she was warm, but she wore hats inside = i wear hats inside all of the time (like right now). winter hats are my favorite.

i hope there's no truth to this. it hurts.

[_all_this_love_]

i actually came up with that first line while i was walking back from the conservatory one night, and there were these amazingly bright leaves everywhere, and it had just rained, so they were shiny and all the lights were reflecting off of them. i thought of that somehow and wanted to use it, so i wrote the rest of the piece from that idea.

winter hats are the best. i'm not so into hats in general, but i would wear winter hats from september to february.

i'm really not entirely sure where this came from . . . the only part that relates to me right now is the dreams. . i'm trying to shake that. <3. but otherwise. . .. no, luckily, i'm not in that situation, or anything like it.

[drzre]

phew, that's good to hear. i don't want any kind of pain like that.

that 'red autumn leaves in white paper envelopes' line still gets me. someone should now go take a picture of red leaves in an envelope. if i had any photography skills, i'd do it.

[_all_this_love_]

i actually was walking and saw a beautiful red leaf and stopped. . . i almost picked it up because i wanted to send it to someone . . . and then realized whoever got a leaf in the mail would probably think i was a little crazy.

it could be a really neat photography project . . . the light would be great, too, between the layers with the envelope, and the veins in the leaf and all . . .

[drzre]

the red leaves in white envelopes ... it's just been stirring inside me for days.

i want to potentially use it in a poem of mine, but i had to ask you for permission first.
here's what i have scribbled up:

"There's a lack of honesty;
I've seen it in silence
and red leaves
that I wish I could send in white envelopes to you."

do you want credit for the idea? i would italicize it and put your name if i was using the same phrasing, but i'm not quoting it exactly. i don't know how to credit someone for inspiration, hah. anyways, let me know if you even want me using it. if you want it for yourself, don't be afraid to stand up and say no. i promise i'll still love you.

[_all_this_love_]

you can definitely use it. i actually feel kind of special that my rambling was inspirational to someone, especially someone who writes and has his own inspiration all the time.

i'm not so worried about crediting, since, as you said, i don't think there really is a way to credit an idea, and you're not using the line directly. since you're not planning on publishing it . . . definitely. . . . go for it. :) and let me know how it turns out for you.

[drzre]

i plan on eventually publishing a lot of my poems on my own. could be in a year, could be in twenty years ... i'm not sure.

why don't you give me your name, and i'll make a note of it now, in case this is one of the poems that does get published. i'll also make note of the line you wrote, so that i can figure out a way of crediting you if the situation does present itself.

[_all_this_love_]

i would love to get some of my work published someday. i really don't know if it could happen or how to make it happen, but it's one of those things i really want to get a chance to do in my life. that, and move to new mexico, and climb lots of mountains, and open a performing arts school, and about a thousand other things.

oh yeah . . . and my name is shannon donegan.

[_____dactyl]

saw justins and had to read yours and omg, i fell in love with it.
its so beautiful and i just pictured it all in my head.
do you write poetry in your journal often? if so id love to add you and read it. i can tell by this, id like anything else youve written

[_all_this_love_]

i don't post creative work daily, the way justin does. . .. i don't write as frequently, i write whenever it comes. . . which is sometimes a few times a week, sometimes once every few weeks. thanks for the compliments, and i'm glad it caught your interest. <3. i'll definitely add you.