[Fic] The Death of Innocence:: Dark

[_ame_no_chikara]

Title: The Death of Innocence::Dark
by: Ame no Chikara
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Adam/Hiro
Word Count: 2,281
Notes: This is one of a set of two one shots dealing with the missing scene in the Volume 2 finale where Hiro somehow manages to get Adam in a grave and strand him there. These one shots do not correspond to one another other than the fact they

Comments

[shockd]

O.o

That was pretty hot, there. Your descriptions the actual act of sex is very good (I swear, if I hear another penis euphemism like "mushroom-tipped love dart", Adam will be the least of the world's worries).

The only thing I can think of for concrit is that the inner dialogue seems a bit OOC for Hiro. And that just may be a personal thing.

Yay! Adam/Hiro NC17 fic! Can't wait for more!

[_ame_no_chikara]

No, I think my Hiro is a bit OOC. But, I felt like almost everything would be cut if I made him my opinion of IC. I'll have to go through later tonight and fix some of the things, though.
Thank you very much =) The next fic will either be from Kensei's perspective (I can get into his head better) or third person. I'm leaning towards third person, though. Haha. I do agree with that. Some people's similies get out of hand.

[nurse_stiney]

...I'm actually not sure if I think your Hiro is OOC at all. Considering how rarely fic authors give him sex, I think this is perfectly IC due to the situation. :D
But yes, YAY Adam/Hiro sex!! \o/ \o/ \o/ \o/ Dark, hot, and perfect. Man, how they managed to do it in a coffin earns my respect, LOL. I love me some dark fics, so I thought this was brilliantly done!! I look forward to the other POV, whatever it may be!!

[_ame_no_chikara]

*glomps* Thank you very much! I was actually just making some adjustments to the fic as you were reading it. LOL I guess you're right about how most authors don't give him the chance to do it... It was hard for me to imagine Hiro having sex. Difficult indeed. Mwaha. =)

[powered_otaku]

Love it! I love Hiro's complete helplessness against his feelings, hating the way he wants everything despite his anger with Adam. Very nice twisted relationship.

[_ame_no_chikara]

Nya ^^ Sankyuu very much!

[powered_otaku]

I really love the love/hate relationship between them and the fact that Adam feels that Hiro belongs to him. I see that being very much the cornerstone of his relationship with Hiro - the fact that Hiro is his property to do with as he wills. Also the inate sense that Hiro "owes" him for what happened.

[_ame_no_chikara]

*nods* I think one of the main reason that their relationship is that way is because Adam kind of has the curse of time eroding his memories. To Adam, it was a long, long time ago and time has made the betrayal seem even more momentous than it was. Whereas Hiro, on the other hand, has just completed that chapter of his life and it's a fresh wound. They have compltely different perspectives on the other due to time.
It's a neat idea, really.

[_ame_no_chikara]

XD Thank you very much. The oneshot that is going to follow this one is going to be really different than this... Thank you for your reaction very much. I guess you're right about him being OOC... although I have changed a bit of the thoughts since I published this at 6 ^^ Sankyuu so much!

[okami_knight]

finally some dark kensei/hiro. i loved this, it was wonderfully written.

please write more!

[_ame_no_chikara]

Thank you very much =) I tried my best to make this... um... as dark as possible O_o Glad you enjoyed it!