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One Last Bid for Freedom

Oct 10, 2010 13:04

Title: One Last Bid for Freedom
Author: Afiawri
Rating: PG
Characters/Pairings: Neal and Peter
Word Count: 321
Notes: for this prompt on collarkink

( Neal was pliant under the hand holding his arm twisted behind his back, not resisting, but not laughing and joking with him either. )

!fanfiction, fandom: white collar, rated: pg

Comments 10

sinkwriter October 10 2010, 20:41:56 UTC

Wow. Interesting (and unusual) take! I feel bad for Neal and think I can understand that last minute panic/'desire for flight' instinct, but at the same time I get how Peter feels and thinks, too. Nicely balanced piece. I like it. :)

afiawri October 11 2010, 18:42:27 UTC

Thank you. That's exactly what I was going for and it means a lot that you see it. :)

sinkwriter October 11 2010, 19:11:47 UTC

I imagine it's like a reflex. Like your story says, as soon as that first cuff snaps into place, the body reacts. I think I can understand that. And I love that line: "It’s said the most dangerous time during an arrest is right after handcuffing the first wrist." That set an immediate tone for me.

:)

china_shop October 10 2010, 20:45:03 UTC

Owwww! (I mean, not the physical injuries, but the trappedness. OW!) This is great -- very vivid. *snugs trapped!Neal*

afiawri October 11 2010, 18:45:13 UTC

Thank you!

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afiawri October 11 2010, 19:04:14 UTC

From the author you should've expected porn to follow. ;)

Thank you so much.

ursula4x October 11 2010, 00:07:48 UTC

Nice....

Poor Neal. So hard to have his wings clipped.

afiawri October 11 2010, 19:06:07 UTC

Thank you.

misura October 11 2010, 15:23:29 UTC

This hurt in a good way? I loved the way you (the reader) got a feeling for both characters, how both Peter's and Neal's actions fit and make sense, with neither coming across as 'the bad guy'.

afiawri October 11 2010, 19:07:27 UTC

Thank you! I'm really pleased you see all that in this fic. :)