Had to make up for a lack I guess.

[agentrogue]

The snow tipped peaks of the mountains belied the intense heat beating down on the land. The afternoon had insisted on teasing the landscape with a subtle breeze here and there which didn't cool enough to provide any real refrain. The sun glared down angrily on the valley in between the mountain tops, heating the armor of four riders making their

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*Ahem.* <i>Only because you asked.</i>

[briester]

I agree. Paragraphs are your friend. Livejournal won't steal your paragraphs if you mark them with a line-break (br) or paragraph tag (p). Use html tags! They work!

Also, sentances are your friend. Sometimes you can get away with a complex sentance, such as one where you use the delectable comma, but a run-on sentance is never your friend. As you can see, I barely got away with that complex sentance! Here's the example of what I'm talking about:

"Very attractive in a reserved way, her long hair hung down her back clashing against her green riding jacket which marked her Ajah."There's just a lack of continuity here... I know because I talk to you a lot that what you mean by "attractive" is that Val is good looking. If I were reading this on my own, I'd be windering if her hair was attractive, of if her riding jacket was. Just keep one subject to each statement, it's easier to read a bunch of easy writing than deciphering a little bit of complex