Week 10 | Untitled

[agoodventure]

Every breath you take
I fear will be your last
Every word you speak
May be your final goodbye

Everytime you blink
I fear your eyes will close
Every step you take
May lead to that fatal fall

Everytime we hug
I fear it will turn cold
Everytime we hold hands
May weaken your grip

As you lie before me
Plastic tubes and all
I fear your sleep
shall be eternal

For one

Comments

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[kelsbels27]

hey angela!

again i am commenting on your page because i really liked this poem.

the fear felt very real, especially because it spoke from a first person perspective. also i think everyone that has experienced death can relate to this poem.

the last stanza was my favourite. keep writing!

[briannacoleman]

Ohwow. I think I commented your journal last week as well, but I can't really help myself. This poem really upset me, simply because I feel like I can really relate to it. I take it literally, in that there is a dying person laying before you, and you just want to freeze them in time to keep them by your side forever. You have a knack for writing poems capable of evoking strong emotions in a reader! Well done.

Take care :)

[bloodnut11]

really good poem. very emotional and veyr personal. definitely speaks to me and it seems to flow at a very consistent tempo. top stuff.
also. you smell