Can I cuddle your comment, please? I WILL TOTALLY RESPECT IT IN THE MORNING ♥ Thank you so, so much, sweetheart. It means a hell of a lot to me that you're enjoying this :)
Oh, your writing is absolutely gorgeous (that last bit with Polyphemus' eye KILLED ME
Also the orgy/rape scene was devastating, and makes perfect sense in his refusal to bed Esca (and I loves Seneca, and the stoics, and everything EVERYTHING).
Oh, oh, you are so lovely! Thank you so much. I'm so glad you picked out the part with Polyphemus! I'm playing with the idea that Marcus is hyperaware of being watched and judged because of his family history. Although of course, that big blue eye watching him while he's in the bath doesn't actually remind him of Polyphemus at all ;D
SO LIKE. I HAVE NO WORDS FOR HOW AWESOME THIS STORY IS.
seriously. it progresses so very nicely, none of the events feel forced or contrived, the narration flows absolutely smoothly in gorgeous, clever sentences. also impressive is your grasp the characters' voices and personality. also appreciated is how you analyse them.
to me it's just utter perfection. i REALLY love it, and can't wait for the rest!
ok, so apparently i DID have words for how awesome this story is... hopefully they're not too convoluted.
(omg though you made me so sad with that gang-bang scene. poor boy ;_______;)
PS. i LOVE the Marcus pov. i don't know why, but i really like seeing this happen from his conflicted perspective.
Oh my god - you - this comment ♥ Thank you so, so much. I appreciate you taking the time to read it and say such lovely things about it! You've made me inarticulate with joy - it took me a while to be able to reply to your comment, because I just don't know how to emphasise how much it means to me. You are an absolute sweetheart ♥
I just read all three chapters and they blew me away. Awesome writing, awesome characterization... just so much WIN. I'm absolutely craving the rest of this story already. Everything in it feels so real (including the historical aspects; you've really shown the different time/place/culture really well) and you've totally captured Marcus and Esca's spirits, if that makes sense.
Also, I have to flail about all the sexual tension/cuddling/connection going on, and comparing Esca to a barbarian woodland god tempting Marcus was just so perfect...as was that freckles line.
Oh my goodness! Thank you so much for such a gorgeous comment. I'm really glad to hear that the history/culture works, without sounding like something from a textbook! I just - god - I adore writing these two. I'm working on the next chapter at the moment :) ♥
Sorry, I'm so late with the feedback, but I was just so in awe that I was having a hard time thinking of things to say. (I still am.) This is really, really, really excellent. I love all the characterization and the description and everything! All of it! This is way better than I could ever write.
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Also the orgy/rape scene was devastating, and makes perfect sense in his refusal to bed Esca (and I loves Seneca, and the stoics, and everything EVERYTHING).
Stunning, lady.
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SENECA FTW ♥ ♥ ♥
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seriously. it progresses so very nicely, none of the events feel forced or contrived, the narration flows absolutely smoothly in gorgeous, clever sentences.
also impressive is your grasp the characters' voices and personality.
also appreciated is how you analyse them.
to me it's just utter perfection. i REALLY love it, and can't wait for the rest!
ok, so apparently i DID have words for how awesome this story is... hopefully they're not too convoluted.
(omg though you made me so sad with that gang-bang scene. poor boy ;_______;)
PS. i LOVE the Marcus pov. i don't know why, but i really like seeing this happen from his conflicted perspective.
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Also, I have to flail about all the sexual tension/cuddling/connection going on, and comparing Esca to a barbarian woodland god tempting Marcus was just so perfect...as was that freckles line.
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Seriously, I am beyond happy that you like it so far, as you're kind of a writing benchmark for me ;D ♥
URGH, GOD, MUST GO AND WRITE MOAR *hugs*
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