erasureathon: sine declinatio
ERASUREATHON ENTRY.
My assignment was lettersandliars, which, omg I could not have been more thrilled about. I knew exactly what fic of hers I wanted to erase, but still spent several hours re-reading EVERYTHING SHE'S WRITTEN EVER and did two additional erasures that I'll post later.
I'm just sad I didn't do this before, because it's really fucking fun.
For this piece, the narrative switches between Axel and Roxas every section (the first section is Axel, the second is Roxas, etc) except for the last two, which are both Axel. /picky additional notes
Title: sine declinatio
Original text(s) erased: savages
Erased by: alice_pike
Original text by: lettersandliars
Fandom (of original text): Kingdom Hearts
Fandom (of erasure): KH still if you want, but it could be original
Notes: For this one, I decided to be a bit more literal with the erasure; I wanted to say the same thing, section by section, that was said in the original, just in fewer words.
Also, the picture quality is terrible. :( The click-throughs are much better, if you're interested.
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Such calm lacks absolutely nothing;
such politeness is a liability.
You have nothing.
You, he remembers.
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Frequently crucial to him:
that moment, that violent emotion,
grace far behind him.
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The thousand hallways are normal to him,
the joke convenient
to his obsession.
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Smoke him out of the shadows.
He's watching, slip-sliding,
not trying to concentrate
on his crazed fucking violence,
but
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He doesn't know enough to feel
insignificant.
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A supplicant,
he sees impossibly.
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Your statement doesn't remind him
but stops you, carefully.
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Sleeping counts as
unrelenting
life.
It is want but
not permission.
He is unable to feel it, but
he does fuck him,
barely touching nothing.
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My assignment was lettersandliars, which, omg I could not have been more thrilled about. I knew exactly what fic of hers I wanted to erase, but still spent several hours re-reading EVERYTHING SHE'S WRITTEN EVER and did two additional erasures that I'll post later.
I'm just sad I didn't do this before, because it's really fucking fun.
For this piece, the narrative switches between Axel and Roxas every section (the first section is Axel, the second is Roxas, etc) except for the last two, which are both Axel. /picky additional notes
Title: sine declinatio
Original text(s) erased: savages
Erased by: alice_pike
Original text by: lettersandliars
Fandom (of original text): Kingdom Hearts
Fandom (of erasure): KH still if you want, but it could be original
Notes: For this one, I decided to be a bit more literal with the erasure; I wanted to say the same thing, section by section, that was said in the original, just in fewer words.
Also, the picture quality is terrible. :( The click-throughs are much better, if you're interested.
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Such calm lacks absolutely nothing;
such politeness is a liability.
You have nothing.
You, he remembers.
-
Frequently crucial to him:
that moment, that violent emotion,
grace far behind him.
-
The thousand hallways are normal to him,
the joke convenient
to his obsession.
-
Smoke him out of the shadows.
He's watching, slip-sliding,
not trying to concentrate
on his crazed fucking violence,
but
-
He doesn't know enough to feel
insignificant.
-
A supplicant,
he sees impossibly.
-
Your statement doesn't remind him
but stops you, carefully.
-
Sleeping counts as
unrelenting
life.
It is want but
not permission.
He is unable to feel it, but
he does fuck him,
barely touching nothing.
-
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