Comments | alicefactor: The Heart Never Lies [1/?]

alicefactor

The Heart Never Lies [1/?]

Apr 14, 2009 19:27

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.angst, rating: pg13, :ichigo/ishida, .mpreg, !fanfic, *bleach, :ichigo/renji, .language

Comments 21

qchanlover April 15 2009, 03:51:08 UTC

maan could ichigo fix all this??

qchanlover April 15 2009, 03:51:32 UTC

sorry *can

alicefactor April 16 2009, 05:13:07 UTC

Dun Dun Dunnn. I know right?! Thanks for the comment.

sofeenalee April 15 2009, 04:23:16 UTC

I'd rather Ichigo never be forgiven for this! Bastard! How dare he hurt our Uryuu!

...Phew, lol I get rather cross when it comes to stories like this, cos I usually find the cheater is forgiven too easily. This is great though, I really needed a shot of ANGST right now, lol.

alicefactor April 16 2009, 05:14:15 UTC

Oh don't worry I don't think Uryuu is going to be forgiving him on easy terms, because he's pissed, and now hormonal. ha! Thanks for the comment.

sakumo April 15 2009, 04:44:06 UTC

Ichigo... You Asshole!! T_T Poor Uryuu :(( Anyway, this fic is very well written and exciting űI can't wait to read the next chapter... :)

alicefactor April 16 2009, 05:16:06 UTC

The "well written" is thanks to my betas xD it was a mess before them. I'm glad to hear some positive feedback! I don't know how I'm going to start the next chapter, but i want to have the beef written hopefully... maybe by the end of this week? it'd be good to update every week.

katsuyakaiba April 15 2009, 05:47:16 UTC

You have my attention...please continue lol.

alicefactor April 16 2009, 05:16:47 UTC

with pleasure. x3 i love that rukia icon, so BDSM for her.

bundamba April 15 2009, 07:45:38 UTC

wow this is great I can't wait for the next chapter!

Please don't think I am being picky but I noticed that you put Uryuu's name twice in these sentances:
"After dinner Uryuu, Uryuu cleaned up while Ichigo paced their bedroom trying to think of anything besides Renji"

"Way too young… but it wasn’t like he could take his proposal back; not when Uryuu Uryuu was so proud of it, so easily able to show off to their friends and gossip with the girls."

Just thought you might want to know.
Always love your work, can't wait to see where this will lead.
Thanks for sharing

alicefactor April 16 2009, 05:18:39 UTC

I know! around 75% of the way through looking over my beta's version i said "argh!" and just replaced ALL the "Ishida [replace with]Uryuu" into "Uryuu Uryuu" on accident, i hope they are corrected now...

Thank you for reading!