So Long, Farewell

Aug 08, 2004 10:55


High in a tower
A maiden sits alone
Looking out
At the sad world below
Its sorrows reflected
In her pale face
Her hand reaches out
And grasps only space
She holds the keys
But she can’t reach the lock
The soft breeze on her face
Serves only to mock
As it whispers of a world
Beyond her finger tips
That she can only watch
Past her tower it slips
Alone, looking down
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A message from your favorite sloth... seasidethoughts August 21 2004, 06:19:30 UTC
Alana!!!
Oh my god. Your poem is absolutely amazing. It totally blew me away. I'm adding you to my friends right this very second. I miss you TONS already.
-Joyce

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Stunning anonymous August 24 2004, 19:06:48 UTC
Some people use words to talk about themselves. Others use words to talk about other people. Still others use words in such a way that there are not words to describe what they have said. I don't know why you stubbornly deny that you have any talent, when you write some of the most amazing things I have ever read from a person our age. You have such amazing potential that should be explored. Serously consider submitting this to a publisher, or at least anonymously to a magazine or something. Although I doubt many people would read it, why don't you send it to the school newspaper?

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Stunning anonymous August 24 2004, 19:09:08 UTC
Some people use words to talk about themselves. Others use words to talk about other people. Still others use words in such a way that there are not words to describe what they have said. I don't know why you stubbornly deny that you have any talent, when you write some of the most amazing things I have ever read from a person our age. You have such amazing potential that should be explored. Serously consider submitting this to a publisher, or at least anonymously to a magazine or something. Although I doubt many people would read it, why don't you send it to the school newspaper? It worries me to think that you feel that way about yourself, but perhaps if you allow this flower of a poem to flourish more people will be able to bask in its beauty and come down from your hiding spot in the tower.

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Re: Stunning allthatjazz817 August 24 2004, 19:16:20 UTC
That is the most eloquent and flattering compliment I have ever recieved. Is it too much to ask who its from?

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Re: Stunning anonymous August 25 2004, 17:14:22 UTC
That's not important. Knowing who says what is not as important as what is said.

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Re: Stunning allthatjazz817 August 26 2004, 11:00:42 UTC
I know that. I really do. But I'm still curious.

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anonymous August 29 2004, 14:30:34 UTC
I don't think its that good..what's all the hub-bub about?

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allthatjazz817 August 29 2004, 17:40:19 UTC
Honestly, I have no clue.

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