quite a compliment coming from an accomplished hot-meister. and for picking up the touching parts i tried to put in.
if you have any real critics i would be tough skinned and like to hear them. usually when i write fic, the physical details are added to round out the picture, but in smut the picture is the fic, and it's hard to find the balance between anatomical/clinical and goofy euphemisms.
so i'm not sure hot is in my future, but i must admit i enjoyed letting ryan get some. and being in control of it! ;o)
Loved this! It was both cute and hot, and I always love Ryan when he's on a quest to get laid :D He's so true that while life in Newport has good sides, it also means that he's not getting laid half as much as we all want.
Was it right that he was turned on by her use of the word cantilevered?
Hee, nice one!
Ryan considered telling her he was whoever she wanted him to be, but couldn’t. “I don’t know anymore,” he replied honestly, “maybe trying too hard to be what everyone wants me to be.”
I liked that he didn't use "Whoever you want me to be." -- that line is for Marissa only, now. And besides, what he replies is so much closer to the truth...
heehee, i liked the cantilevered line, too. the whole suave womanizer combining with the physics nerd was irresistable. i don't think ryan would ever laid as much as the we gals here would like!!
i'm excited to go read your fic when i've time. it's like chrismuakkah. thanks again for your nice words.
no Seth, last year wasn’t better than this I found this amusing and hot all rolled into one. The idea of Ryan pretending to be a teacher, taking responsibility, and seducing a fire inspector is hilarious. But it did deal with some nasty little details that Josh and his crew left out. Of course it was really hot... liked how Tally coaxes the Truth out of Ryan, making him share. Great job.
thanks, famous, for seeing the funny as well as my attempt at hot. i've been uninspired by this season and last so far. so 'hot' was a way to make the challenge really challenging.
I don't think I've read the Hot from you before, but I must say it was very well done. I'm all of a fluster. I loved the whole Private Ryan thing, and how she got im to tell her things about himself (in between gasps, lol). You portrayed Tally well too, no mean feat with an original character. The last line was hilarious!
this was my first time i attempted smut so thanks for the encouraging words. the episode was a real low point in S2 so i went for silly. my first ideas were for tally to be a bit ho - as in the horse themed 'tally ho'. but she changed as i wrote her.
looking forward to reading all the other fics, esp yours. today, i hope.
Fab, DEAR. You're due a more detailed reveiw later when I am home and on my computer, but the smut was ace and the story very very nice indeed. And you worked Iraq in, which is a nifty touch. I loved it.
it's so nice to read these reviews from authors like you than i really like. i hadn't been so anxious since my very first piece way back in my only fanfic.com days! smut is tricky writing, yes?
Sorry for slow replying - I was away from home and analysing smut is so much better done at one's own computer. But yes, smut can indeed be tricky. Gets easier with practice (but alos you start fearing endless repetition, at least I do). I thought you wrote very nioce, hot, understated yet effective stuff; and your Tally was quite an engaging character...
Also loved the cantilevered moment, and the whole Iraq sequence, and the way you had Ryan throwing in a little Greek mythology at the end. A little erudition never hurts - such a Renaissance man that boy is proving to be...
Again - a pleasure. I hope you do more of that (it gets addictive).
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Strangely touching amongst all the hot!
What I would pay to see that missing scene.
Thanks Honey.
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if you have any real critics i would be tough skinned and like to hear them. usually when i write fic, the physical details are added to round out the picture, but in smut the picture is the fic, and it's hard to find the balance between anatomical/clinical and goofy euphemisms.
so i'm not sure hot is in my future, but i must admit i enjoyed letting ryan get some. and being in control of it! ;o)
thanks again for writing me.
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Was it right that he was turned on by her use of the word cantilevered?
Hee, nice one!
Ryan considered telling her he was whoever she wanted him to be, but couldn’t. “I don’t know anymore,” he replied honestly, “maybe trying too hard to be what everyone wants me to be.”
I liked that he didn't use "Whoever you want me to be." -- that line is for Marissa only, now. And besides, what he replies is so much closer to the truth...
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i'm excited to go read your fic when i've time. it's like chrismuakkah. thanks again for your nice words.
may i friend you?
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Or as much as *he* would like...
And sure, friend me! (May I friend you back?)
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I found this amusing and hot all rolled into one. The idea of Ryan pretending to be a teacher, taking responsibility, and seducing a fire inspector is hilarious. But it did deal with some nasty little details that Josh and his crew left out.
Of course it was really hot... liked how Tally coaxes the Truth out of Ryan, making him share. Great job.
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looking forward to reading all the other fics, esp yours. today, i hope.
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Also loved the cantilevered moment, and the whole Iraq sequence, and the way you had Ryan throwing in a little Greek mythology at the end. A little erudition never hurts - such a Renaissance man that boy is proving to be...
Again - a pleasure. I hope you do more of that (it gets addictive).
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