I wasn't originally planning on posting this but due to
chanjuu 's kind response, I've decided to post it up. Please note that this is the first time I've ever written a fanfic so it isn't as good as everyone else's.
I can't promise a sequel cos I have no idea where I am going with this.
This is only a draft and this is also temporary and will be deleted
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It was really good as you already know :D
NOW YOU MUST WRITE SECOND CHAPTER ASAP.
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It's your fault cos you just HAD to like to so much :)
I WANT TO WRITE A SECOND CHAP.
But I have no idea where the story is going. I was originally planning on changing Yamada's past into something else rather than a domestic problem but since you're curious about the scar thing then I have to carry on with this storyline.
:D
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hahahah. its your fault for writing such a kickass, cliff hanging first chapter ;)
you have to now lol i wont stop bugging you otherwise
whatever you chose as yamada's scar problem, i know it will surprise me to no end :D
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But I don't believe that it was a kick ass cliff-hanger. It was alright but it wasn't THAT good. I mean, you're one is still way better compared to this piece of crap. THAT WAS TOO NEGATIVE. Fine. It's okay for a first effort. Yes. Agreed.
LOL.
I've attempted writing the second chapter but I'm at loss for how to start it. I hope it'll surprise you :D
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Write a sequel, this one doesn't even seem finished! And Yamada suits the character so unbelievably much! :D
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AMAZING FEEDBACK KAREN.
Seriously, what do you honestly think of this?
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That's what I think!
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Hmmm keito seems so mysterious now,
I mean they're mean to be bestfriends but he didn't tell Yamada what's going on with him and Aoi!!
Hmph!
I like how you started it, but I wonder how the whole biological family is
going to tie in with yamada keito and aoi's love triangle! Lol!!
mannnn it I bet you it's gonna be an awesome twist!
Can't wait for chapter two :)
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Everyone keeps complaining about the cliffhanger so I guess I did a good job at making everyone curious about what may happen next :D
THANK YOU FOR SUCH A DETAILED RESPONSE :D
I appreciate it :D
I'm re-writing the whole domestic abuse thingy into something else. It'll surprise you. Hopefully.
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(and no, i'm not fake kindness)
^_____^
i'll be waiting for the contiuation. (:
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As you can see, I haven't been on LJ in days.
First of all, thank you for taking your time in reading my crap fanfic. And second, thank you for your compliments :)
Although I disagree, thank you :D
I don't think I'll go on with chapter two. Cos so far, I've written two paragraphs and I'm at loss for what to do next.
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I've started chapter two and by start, I mean like two paragraphs, but I'm currently trying to finish all my homework. So I'm really sorry for delaying my update.
Hello Chelsea. Nice to meet you too :D I'm Aminah! But feel free to call me whatever you want :)
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