An attempt at "The-GIRL-Who-Lived", challenge brought forth in deleterius...

[amoury]

Starts more by movieverse than bookverse; BV would basically be restating everything while inserting the words "She, her, Rose" instead of "He, his, Harry". I wanted to start with Dumbledore and all, but that again seemed redundant. It starts with Rose at "home" with the Dursleys, nearing her 11th birthday.

Comments

[theoryoferin]

saw that you'd taken the challenge over on deleterius and thought i'd come take a look.
seems good to me, but i wasn't the one to set the standards. :]

[amoury]

I like challenges. They challenge me. Ooooh. :)

[theoryoferin]

that was deep.
mind if i add you? you seem like my kind of lj friend.

[amoury]

Yes, I am deep. rather knee deep. In matter I don't wish to describe.
Oh I kid.
And of course, I shall add thee as well! Toodle, noodle. :)

[stablehand]

I really liked it, actually! Great work.

[amoury]

Fanks yas. Mighty nice of ya ta say, sugah. ;)

[das_mervin]

Not bad. Not bad at all. Nice changes you made. Liked the brown hair instead of black, and the fact that the Girl-Who-Lived would not have been able to keep wearing old hand-me-downs from a boy for TOO long. Liked the fact that she was more of a maid, too.

However, remember. You're not to the hard part, yet! The hard part is Hogwarts. Keep up the good work! It's looking great!

[amoury]

Haha, I'll take it on. *Gets fists ready for MORE sues that come charging*

[ashikawayuki]

I saw the challenge at deleterius too and thought I'd come take a look. It looks great so far. Mind if I friend you?

[amoury]

Not at all! I'll friend you in turn! :) HI!

[ashikawayuki]

Awesome ^^ ::waves::

[amoury]

RAWKIN'! :D

[tea_elle]

*saw at deleterius as well*

Oh, I like. Very good for a draft, too. I did notice a few errors (like you wrote "gotten" instead of "got" a few times), but since it's rough, I can forgive them (I'm nitpicky, ignore me if you wish). Keep it up, and good luck on fightng off the Sues.