An original short-fic: Written for 15 Minute Ficlets

[angelschilde]

Quick self pimpage. Wrote this in 15 minutes (hence the 15 minute ficlet).

Adore me.

Title: Caged
Author: Angelschilde
Word Count: 334
Rating: Very soft PG

Comments

[damnskippytoo]

I don't know who these people are, but I hated their life, too. Thank the Lord she left. :)

That was achingly poignant and yet hopeful. Now where's the next chapter of my fic, huh? *wink*

[pirate_x_savvy]

My only critique--the word tepid looks very out of place. Other than that, it flows very well, and you manage to get the story across without drowning the plot with unnecessary info--always refreshing.

[let_goxjump_in]

I hate to sound like the Paula to Cort's Randy but...I gotta agree with the use of "tepid". I like the word itself and I get what you mean, but it seems awkward with the rest of your word choice. But don't get me wrong - I loooved the story! I absolutely adore when it only takes a few lines to get me emotionally involved, and this was the perfect example. What a sad and lovely story.

[angelschilde]

I know what you mean, actually. But I couldnt think of a better word to use, and I only had 15 minutes--didnt wanna waste it digging through a dictionary, you know? Hehe. But yay! Cort and Sam feedback! I never get Cort and Sam feedback!

[arknflark]

I liked this a lot Shannon - with just a few throw-away images like "Cheap pasta dinner" you evoked a whole vista of what their life was going to be like.

I actually managed to care about both of your characters by halfway through your ficlet, which I think is quite staggering when I only know Anna's name. She felt trapped in a life she hated and her husband's self esteem must have been eroded a little more each day by her reaction to their life - and to him. I ached for both of them - though as Debs says, you're left with the feeling of hope for both of them.

Well done.

[darlakane]

God, Shannon, I just love your writing. You really wrote that in just 15 minutes? Wow.