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annabirmingham

Friday at the sandbox - Part 7 "McDate"

Jul 24, 2011 21:13

Summary - Modern day AU/AU. Ennis, Jack, kids, a playground, coffee and donuts...

Warnings - none
Length - c400 words
Feedback - yes please!

Jack persuades Ennis to join him for lunch...

( clickety click )

fridayatthesandbox

Comments 32

Sweet joetheone July 25 2011, 02:32:08 UTC

I love the McD's scene and can imagine it all in my head and especially loved the seductive stroking of Jack's drink. Joe

Re: Sweet annabirmingham July 25 2011, 18:30:28 UTC

Thanks Joe! I read somewhere that our hands often convey what we are not saying. No prizes for guessing what Jack was thinking...
Anna x

sliveredmoon July 25 2011, 03:59:51 UTC

Yaaaay! Was happy to see you posted another chapter...also glad you're letting them take their time.

annabirmingham July 26 2011, 18:27:09 UTC

Thanks! Yes, the guys have to take their time in this situation I think - can't just jump into bed with the kiddies around!
Anna x

sliveredmoon July 26 2011, 18:34:01 UTC

You're right, of course. Children would be inhibiting! I think also, there is a certain tension, good tension, that comes from the tentative, exploratory nature of their encounters. They both seem to sense an attraction, but what to do with it, where to go with it, they're a little bit unsteady, and I like that.I loved it, for example, in the previous chapter, when you described that their shoulders brushed and Ennis didn't move away. It's the little things. You are drawing a lovely, very authentic experience. I'm thoroughly enjoying it.

annabirmingham July 26 2011, 18:43:43 UTC

Thanks again! I agree that children are definitely inhibiting for our guys. Reading/writing the beginning of a relationship is my favourite part. The little touches, looks - the tension, lust, exploration etc. I love to dwell on that - until it all explodes of course! heheh...

sienata July 25 2011, 05:18:20 UTC

yayayay. i believe we have a date!!! or the makings of a date! that's cool. i'm really enjoying this. i like that ennis runs and is all muscly and has a sexy tan. i wonder what jack sells. can't wait to read more. :)

annabirmingham July 26 2011, 18:28:08 UTC

Thanks Jane. Definitely the beginnings of a date here for sure :) Glad you are still liking this!
Anna x

roby100 July 25 2011, 06:22:37 UTC

Sweet McDate! I knew it was the perfect place for kids. Maybe next time they will be alone...
Lovely small steps, lovely talking and knee brushing.
As usual the best way to start my day.
Thanks :)
A big hug
Roby

annabirmingham July 26 2011, 18:29:04 UTC

Thanks so much Roby! I guess it was perfect for the kids and at least the guys got to talk - albeit only for a short time. But better than nothing!
Anna x

zeltia July 25 2011, 13:40:15 UTC

Love the sweet little details, touches and glances. Awesome job.

Thank you so much.

annabirmingham July 26 2011, 18:29:17 UTC

Thanks! So glad you are enjoying it!
Anna x