does this sound like a beginning or an end?

[aperfectsong]

If James could go back to the day they met, shouting to each other across the marsh between their apartment buildings, dusk and cattails coloring his first memory of her, he thinks he would have asked her then.

He no longer remembers the way she spoke, the way they all spoke, so when he imagines her response it sounds something like this:

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[mmmrorschach]

Definitely a beginning. It sounds like someone thinking back over a decision they made and that reminiscence affects how he would normally behave, so he does something differently to avoid repeating a mistake. And then an interesting story happens because of his decision to behave differently.

[aperfectsong]

Thanks for your input. I wrote it as a beginning, but the last part of it to me reads like a conflict resolution for James. It's so hard. My old beginning didn't bring the conflict in. My new beginning resolves it. =/

This is for a story, entitled Gloves, that I've been working on-and-off for going on three years. It's a story of James' relationship with the woman with the gloves. I hope this revision brings me closer to the final draft of this.