shaken in my faith: master of illusion - part four

[apsaraqueen]

update! dialogue-heavy as always, but i think there's some semblance of a plot in this one, and it may actually be moving forward! a little longer than usual, so please bear with me :/

parts one, two, and three in case you want to catch up!

Comments

[cbrandtwright]

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It hurts so good.

Seriously, you've outdone yourself with this chapter. There are too many favorite lines I want to quote, so I'll just mark for memories and come back to enjoy.

:D

[apsaraqueen]

:DDD thank you so much! i keep feeling like when i go back and re-read, things are getting disjointed and i'm losing plot points all over the place (i swear there is a grand design in this, SOMEWHERE), so it's reassuring that you're still faithfully following along ;D i appreciate it, as always!

[ellorgast]

I don't even know where to begin talking about how amazing this is. Your flawless characterization, your rich details, your amazing worldbuilding, your beautiful imagery, your mythical tone. I mean, every time I feel like I've kind of settled in to the flow of this fic and where it's going, you throw in ten thousand new elements to mix it up again, and I love it.

He built a palace of glass at the crossroads of the Middle and Far Eastern lands, and there he welcomed a guest. The most formidable leader of men in any part of the world, the kingmaker who would change his destiny, though the boy didn’t know that yet.

This line alone. I want to MARRY this line. Or let's just apply the title of "kingmaker" to Kunzite for all time and I will forever be fanning myself in his presence. I love the implication, just like I love all of your near-mythical ideas of how things worked in the SilMil, that it was Kunzite who found the other Shitennou and brought them together.

For Jadeite no longer knows who is the beast, and who is the blade.

[apsaraqueen]

I don't even know where to begin talking about how amazing this is. Your flawless characterization, your rich details, your amazing worldbuilding, your beautiful imagery, your mythical tone. I mean, every time I feel like I've kind of settled in to the flow of this fic and where it's going, you throw in ten thousand new elements to mix it up again, and I love it.

thank you thank you thank you! that is such a huge compliment! in all honesty, i keep throwing in new things because as much as i'd like to think i have a legit plan, in reality i just keep coming up with crazy shit on the fly - so please let me know if it starts veering into freaky territory, i would absolutely welcome any criticism on flow, pacing, anything.

have a feeling it's going to need some serious revision once it's done :/

Or let's just apply the title of "kingmaker" to Kunzite for all time and I will forever be fanning myself in his presence.right there with you. i'm trying to give silmil a more "real" feel with dialogue and such...but at the same time keep that

[anonymous]

haha! Kunzite's married! hows that going for Mina? or had gone for her?

[apsaraqueen]

i'm sure that little tidbit will not make her very happy ;D

[charliechaplin2]

So wait, wait, wait. Thetis was related to Endymion?! And she married KUNZITE?!?!?

There is going to be so much tension with Mina.

XD

[apsaraqueen]

oh, just you wait. i think not writing mina and married!kunz is almost going to be more fun than actually writing them, there's going to be all kinds of freaky tension radiating off those two in the background...

thetis is...related to endymion, but not in the way you think. you'll see :P

[charliechaplin2]

Also: Nephrite getting other women to show married!Kunz their tits is hilarious. So freaking hilarious.