FMA: 52 Flavours, Prompt 19

[artemisrae]

 Title: Follow Through
Series: Fullmetal Alchemist
Theme no.: 19. An ancient game of virgin sacrifice
Pairing: Ed/Winry
Rating: Ehhh. I think it’s okay with T, but let’s go with M (for not particularly graphic awkward virgin sex) just to be safe?
Summary: And the first they slept together - that had been the most embarrassing.
Notes: Second of three

Comments

[lyricnonsense]

BWAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
*deep breath*
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

I'm really glad juxtaposie got you to post it! I've been wondering just what happened, and this is so very Ed and so very Winry and so very human. Love love love.

[artemisrae]

I really did want to write something totally humiliating but that could also... you know. Happen. Without rewriting my own humiliating first time, that is. Either way, I'm glad you liked it!

[artemisrae]

LOL. That would be appropriate, considering Ed's religious beliefs?

[zuppi]

Gah! Brilliant! Just how Ed/Winry should be... awkward, embarrassing and adorable! I love awkward!first time when it comes to Ed and Winry. It's just how it should be. He's such an emotional dork, turning him into some kind of sex god is just - No! I will not speak of it!

I love Ed and his fumblings, his cute dialogue and of course I love Winry for being awesome and (figuratively) knocking some sense into that noodle, Edward Elric!

Well done!

[artemisrae]

Thank you! It's always the first time - I'm all for sex god!Ed, but not right away. Or for a long long time. It always takes me out of the fic when they mention that it's the first time and it's this amazing orgasmic thing.

[zuppi]

Exactly! I know people often read fic to get away from real life, but it's a real back button pusher for me. First time awesome sex just seems so unrealistic for most characters and situations... Ed the dense dork, more than most!

[artemisrae]

I definietly takes me out of the moment - I'll finish the fic, but then I automatically have to sort of... ignore that? Pretend it wasn't said? That I never read it? LOL. First time sex is such a disaster, and there's no way Edward Elric is going to be the master of it first time out of the gate.

[nebroadwe]

I'm not usually comfortable reading or writing stories where the mechanics of sexual encounter are front and center (I usually skip the sex bits in other people's work and every romantic encounter I've ever plotted finishes behind a discreetly-drawn narrative curtain). So I'm happy that this piece suggests the mechanics in order to set up the dialogue, which does a lovely job of depicting the way that it's possible, with the best intentions, to somehow say EXACTLY the wrong thing at the wrong moment to someone you love. The collapse/recovery cycle of the encounter is both funny and poignant -- my favorite combination.

[artemisrae]

<>which does a lovely job of depicting the way that it's possible, with the best intentions, to somehow say EXACTLY the wrong thing at the wrong moment to someone you love.

Well you know... it's Ed. If there's anyone who would do it, it would be him. I'm glad it wasn't too graphic for you - even the bits that I have written that have been kind of sexish, I've really tried not to go too far - for my own personal sanity (god know I'm mortified just to publish this) and because... well... it's Ed. Like I said.

The collapse/recovery cycle of the encounter is both funny and poignant

WELL he IS a young man having sex for the first time. Some things are simply automatic. LOL.

[fairy_dogma]

"Ed refused to look at her, uneasily tracing the pattern of the comforter with one hand as he looked at the floor, convinced he’d never be able to maintain an erection ever again."

Best. Line. EVER.

[artemisrae]

HEE. Embarrassment is more powerful than the coldest shower.