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WiP The Summer Al Tried to Live Chapter 8

Jul 30, 2009 10:59

Author: asnowyowl
Title: The Summer Al Began Tried to Live: Chapter 8
Pairing: Albus Severus/Scorpius
Summary: In the summer before college, Al Potter finally begins living, but can he find the courage to show his family who he really is? In this chapter: Sunday dinner
Warnings: none really
Rating: This chapter: PG13 for language
Beta: bk7brokemybrain.
Word Count: 3290
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food: bread, freeform: time travel, place: godric's hollow, emotion: nostalgia, fic, person: gellert grindelwald, object: cleansweep five, song: queen

Comments 16

phys_nut July 30 2009, 15:24:10 UTC

wooo!! another wonderful chapter and oh! all the emotions in the last scene with the fight and whatnot, damn near broke my heart! silly albus! *shakes him* don't be so afraid!!
i was wondering how you'd put in scorpius' real name, nice touch! and your hugo is wonderful, i love him!!

i cannot wait for the next chapter, i hope everything works out for the boys!! *crosses finger, toes, arms, legs, eyes, etc...)

asnowyowl July 31 2009, 14:52:03 UTC

Thanks!
Hugo was a blast to write. *squishes him*

chrisvel July 30 2009, 16:28:52 UTC

Oh my, such a great chapter!
First the wonderful family diner ... everything really went so well, almost unbelievable and then ... bam! there's the angst ... oh and the first small fight.
Poor Albus ... can't help but feel a little sorry for him. You make his fears so real and believable.
I am so looking forward to next week!

asnowyowl July 31 2009, 14:53:57 UTC

Thank you! I've been trying to write this so it seems realistic, so I'm glad that's working.

brknhalo241 July 30 2009, 16:55:00 UTC

Oh....so glad Al stayed in the driveway. I understand his side, though. Corey is a completely different personality and has had years to make his way to the place where is now in dealing with himself. This is all new for Al and happening quickly so it makes sense that he would be faltering and making mistakes along the way. These two have a lot of bumps ahead of them but hopefully they'll keep doing what they did here....talking and listening.

asnowyowl July 31 2009, 14:57:54 UTC

Thank you!
Yes, Corey and Al have such different personalities. Even though they fit well and complement each other, Corey has trouble understanding why Al would be hesitant to put himself out there for scrutiny.

Thanks so much for reading!

kingzgurl July 30 2009, 18:09:43 UTC

awwwwwww, yay for making up <3

AS/S can haz hot make-up sex now?

asnowyowl July 31 2009, 14:59:02 UTC

*nods* Yes, theyz can haz hot make us sex now.

Thankd for reading!

mysecretashes July 31 2009, 00:12:36 UTC

I love this chapter so much. Dinner started off so awkwardly, and Hugo was hilarious - somebody needed to break the tension!

I was waiting on a fight to happen, and even though it made me sad I think they needed it. Real relationships include fights, and I'm hoping that it helps them grow stronger and helps Al gain more confidence. (Not to mention the make-up sex. There MUST BE make-up sex. *nods*)

asnowyowl July 31 2009, 15:01:31 UTC

LOL! Yes, there absolutely MUST be make-up sex!

I'm trying to make this as realistic as I can, so the fights had to/have to come. Al and Corey have such opposite personalities (even though they complement each other) that it will sometimes be hard for them to understand the other's point of view.